An elderly lady is disturbed about a premonition.

Fred, Ethel and Roger arrived shortly after eight to find Frank already there waiting for his friend, checker board in hand. Martha didn’t play cards but sat in her rocking chair by the stove, listening to the conversation at the table and the occasional muffled laughter from the boys upstairs. It was nearly eleven before the last game was over and Ada  quickly cleared the table and made ready the usual “cup of tea” which always included Ada’s home made bread with butter and jam and molasses buns.  They had just begun eating when  a rumbling followed by a great crash sent everyone scrambling outside. The other residents of Strickland Bright were also outside shouting to each other in the darkness. Children were heard whimpering and being comforted by their equally stunned parents. Soon a half dozen lanterns lit up the short, narrow road that led through the community and loud shouts could be heard from the men now gathered where Fred and Ethel’s house lay shattered beneath a pile of rubble. The melting snow of the past winter followed by the drenching rains had loosened the earth at the top of the hill sending tons of debris and large boulders crashing into the house. Anyone inside would have been killed instantly. Standing alone in the doorway as the others ran towards the now half buried house, Martha thinking of her insistence that Roger accompany his parents that night, murmured a soft “thank you”.

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  • nobert soloria bermosa on Jul 18, 2009

    this is nice, i could almost feel how wonderful it is when a prayer is answered

  • Daisy Peasblossom on Jul 18, 2009

    Very, very well done. Nice tension, with happy ending.

  • Allison Lane on Jul 18, 2009

    yes it certainly is well done! I really enjoyed it!

  • maryann on Jul 18, 2009

    another great story, you make seem so real,almost as if we are there. well done

  • Melody SJAL on Jul 18, 2009

    Nice story.

  • Judy Sheldon on Jul 19, 2009

    I love your stories. Your descriptions are so real. I will have to read this one again when I get back from church.

    Thanks and God bless!

  • Tish Trowbridge on Jul 19, 2009

    Awesome story and what a great way to tell us that God really will answer our prayers! Thanks Mose and God Bless.

  • Lex92 on Jul 19, 2009

    I can feel your prayer get answered!!! God works in mysterious ways

  • PR Mace on Jul 19, 2009

    Oh, Moses, how well done this was. I believe in prayer.

  • valli on Jul 19, 2009

    Awesome story with happy ending!

  • goodselfme on Jul 19, 2009

    Thank you for sharing this lovely story and great ending with me.

  • Moses Ingram on Jul 20, 2009

    Thanks everyone for reading and commenting.

  • Ruby Hawk on Jul 20, 2009

    Moses what a wonderful story. I enjoyed every bit of it. It just goes to show miracles do happen and sometimes we can help them along.

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