Wish I had dinner again.

Now don’t ask me what I had for dinner.While having it, I was then concentrating on Mr.Right facing me and giving me an elaborate introduction of Mr. Wrong.They two were in company for the past ten hours, and I being the third one to board the train and make the crowd.

Well, Mr Wrong, as I kept listening, was a regular shirker, a boy with an exam phobia;he  confessed, had abstained from his graduation exams on the pretext of illness.Thus we conclude he had no right to be travelling so aimlessly [fortunately I had an aim] at the cost of his father, who I learnt was a retired soldier with limited means. The boy was going to a friend’s house and spend some days.

I thus took sides with Mr. Right, and the story- What the old man does is always Right came back to me. The boy was fairly tall,a bit too cheerful and inclined towards the obese.He was carrying a mammoth sized suitcase, another cause of annoyance for Mr. Right, however, that well suited his hefty built.

Dinner was inclusive in the ticket expenses, and the two already had theirs before I boarded the train.On seeing me so engrossed in the compelling Mr.Right, the attendants conveniently forgot to serve me dessert, my cup of ice cream.

A flask of hot water , tea bags and accessories woke us up next morning.Mr.Right popped in all those into his case taking only hot water. I followed suit but had plain black tea.

Then as eyes met, began afresh the whole episode.The boy,had a disarming humility about him and seemed to plead to me to leave him alone. This made me recall: there is a time and place for everything but how could that work in this case?When else could we counsel him? Didn’t we have a social responsibility? Moreover, Mr. Right appeared to be a neat and orderly person, overtly astounded at every anomaly he encountered.He had thin lips stretched into a permanent smile[cynical], saving him from  having to make an effort, the lips being an anomaly on him I assume.

Mr. Right was constantly asking the boy for his mobile so that he could ask to his father why he was so indulgent towards his son. Meanwhile, the boy, to divert him yanked a squeaky  yellow toy which he had bought as a gift for his friend’s child and asked him, not out of impertinence, Sir, how’s it?Taken aback, Mr. Right I think only stopped short of thrashing him.

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  • ken bultman on Apr 29, 2010

    An entertaining travel adventure. You have discrepancies?

  • Jewelstar on Apr 29, 2010

    very well narrated journey experience.

  • Ruby Hawk on Apr 29, 2010

    iI sounds to me as if Mr. Right was brow beating Mr.Wrong. I’m surprised he stayed in Mr. Rights company, It must have been uncomfortable for you.

  • CA Johnson on Apr 29, 2010

    This was a very interesting story. I agree with Ruby that Mr. Right was really giving Mr. Wrong a hard time. He certainly handled that situation better than most people would have handled it.

  • ronthoughts on Apr 29, 2010

    A well written journey and experience on Mr.Right and Wrong.
    Liked!
    SU’d!

  • Eunice Tan on Apr 29, 2010

    Very interesting story.

  • Wilbart26 on Apr 29, 2010

    A very good post. Keep up the good work.

  • NishaMeledath on Apr 30, 2010

    You sound naughtier than your age Mrs. wonder. It was an entertaining read. Keep posting.

  • Starpisces on Apr 30, 2010

    Very interesting Wonder, were you influenced by me? As recently I notice you are becoming naughtier, hehe….but fun…
    I hope I can go for a train ride with you and watch the Mr Right and Mr Wrong together…
    Keep writing, Wonder…enjoyed very much.
    :P

  • Emmie on Apr 30, 2010

    Hey,

    Great story, really enjoyed the read.

    Emmie x

  • Jimmy Shilaho on Apr 30, 2010

    An interesting story.

  • diamondpoet on Apr 30, 2010

    Very interesting piece one never know what will happen when they travel.

  • lumiscence on Apr 30, 2010

    Mr Right seems to be a know it all. What right do we have to judge others?

    He who is without sin let him cast the first stone should be the maxim

  • ginahinderliter on Apr 30, 2010

    Interesting Journey!

  • Tulan on Apr 30, 2010

    Your fellow traveler sounds really rude.I am sorry you had to endure that behavior.

  • VTech on Apr 30, 2010

    Good Post.

  • lillyrose on May 1, 2010

    That was sure not a peaceful train ride! I think Mr. Wright should mind his own business.

  • Heatherhills on May 1, 2010

    A well told venture of a journey on a train.

  • Niti sharma on May 1, 2010

    Nice to read.

  • zoeyclark on May 1, 2010

    At least you made good use of the delay;)

  • Priyanka Bhowmick on May 1, 2010

    very finely described and very less journeys r found to be such interesting.. nice share :)

  • rajaryanme on May 2, 2010

    Nice post thanks for sharing

  • sara20 on May 3, 2010

    Excellent writing with very informative sharing.

  • sunitakrb on May 3, 2010

    Nice Writing and sharing Good & informative Piece. Thanks and Cheers.

    Sunita:

  • neha80 on May 6, 2010

    Interesting Piece.

    Today I know more about it. Good subject selection for writing article.

    Thanks for sharing good one.

    Anjal….!!!

  • bestone on May 9, 2010

    good post

  • MarketingYourWebsiteOnline on May 12, 2010

    Great story… thanks for sharing….

  • drelayaraja on Jun 12, 2010

    Wonderfully presented. Nice writing.

  • jupiter2010 on Jun 12, 2010

    Very nice writing.

  • chitragopi on Jun 12, 2010

    The subtle humour makes your writing unique and interesting. Keep writing more.

  • freeurmind on Jun 12, 2010

    Really nice journey, thanks for sharing..

  • lovenluck on Jun 14, 2010

    thanks for the expressive and simple share

  • Anuradha Ramkumar on Jun 15, 2010

    Very interesting read. I’m sure you had an interesting train journey.

  • NIYATI BHAT on Jun 15, 2010

    PRETTY INTERESTING…YOU R A FINE STORY TELLER..NICE READ :)

  • ashabari on Jun 19, 2010

    Very nicely narrated, specially the way you have roped in the two characters : Mr. Right and Mr. Wrong !!

  • Abhipray Sahoo on Jul 9, 2010

    HAHAHHAH mr. Wrong and Mr. Right!
    Awesome job!

  • gaby7 on Aug 5, 2010

    You are an amazing writer wonder! This one is just mind blowing!

  • SharifaMcFarlane on Nov 23, 2010

    You’ll have to carry some music to listen to next time. What an annoying man.

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