I was dead long ago but I didn’t know.

It was almost mid night and I was about to sleep when I  heard a loud shriek followed by a gunshot.I became frightened,I was  curious about what happened and ,I ran towards the main door.I saw a corpse on the ground.It was so dark and dreadful night  that even I couldn’t see my hands.My heart beats became orderless.Cold breeze was chilling my marrow.I went inside  my house and took candle but as I lighten the candelabra in my hand  it fell down as I was turned into butter hand due to fear.

Then,some how I dragged the dead body inside and brought it into light but suddenly an awful and heart bursting scream of mine echoed and broke the silence of room.That corpse was totally like me . I looked at my own body I couldn’t believe how someone else can be same like me,hair,face,whole body, and even the night dress that I was wearing.I turned pale and my whole body was trembling.I dragged the body and buried it in graveyard at the back of my house.Days passed and this incident started to faint. One day I was rambling outside and I saw my neighbor and called his name but he didn’t listened. I got closer to him and he was making me feel like I’m not present there.I grabbed his collars  and shouted”listen to me.”He took no action,you know what happened he passed from my body. and headed towards his garden.I was gobsmacked because I was just a soul.He was alive and I was dead.My soul was living that means I was dead at that night and that night my soul buried my body.I started to cry and screamed “No this can’t happen,I’m alive” but truth was that I was dead and I didn’t know.I was living in this world but I belong to some other world.Someone murdered me.

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  • ASWIN S on Sep 2, 2011

    Nice Dream.

    When it happened?????

  • Sunjhini on Sep 2, 2011

    i loved the photographs too … nice post

  • Martin Kloess on Sep 2, 2011

    great work

  • Aroosa Gloomy on Sep 2, 2011

    Aswin this happened long ago as I mentioned.It’s not dream this is resembles that I’m dead by peoples harsh words,they hurt me and mistakes I made.

  • packtrack on Sep 2, 2011

    too many emotions.. eye lab it… cool…

  • ittech on Sep 2, 2011

    oops

  • thelyricwriter on Sep 2, 2011

    I tell you what, to be your age, this is amazing. And I am not just saying that. I am known for picking out talent. You have a gift. Follow your heart and dreams. Whatever you want to be, you can. No doubt. “my heart beats became orderless”. When you keep a reader looking forward to each line, that is talent. Gifted you are young one. Never let it go.

  • tonyleather on Sep 2, 2011

    interesting

  • Aroosa Gloomy on Sep 2, 2011

    Thankx @thelyicwriter.I actually get relief when i write this type of stuff.

  • erwinkennythomas on Sep 2, 2011

    filled with much imagery! excellent post! like the visuals!

  • ASWIN S on Sep 3, 2011

    If you accept ur defeat just by the mistakes you did and others harsh words, many of us around you, me and others will be dead and we will be talking to their souls.

    If we try to revive from them like a phoenix then we can say we are living a life.

  • Nali on Sep 3, 2011

    nice

  • ivantantan on Sep 4, 2011

    the pictures are scary :D

  • Socorro Lawas on Sep 9, 2011

    The photos are eerily lovely, haunting.

  • PruandMe on Sep 12, 2011

    There will likely be many more deaths and even a few rebirths in your future . . . some will bring sadnes, some relief . . . all are necessary as you have begun to see. Keep th posts coming!

  • vardhanh71 on Sep 15, 2011

    good article…………………

  • FX777222999 on Sep 16, 2011

    The plot is good that helps the story flows from the start up to the end. I observed that you’re using lots of the word “I’s.” You can rephrase some and make it into a final piece. Thanks.

  • pattiann on Sep 17, 2011

    Fantastic idea, well written and good pictures

  • OrmusNation on Sep 27, 2011

    An excellent poem, that instills great imagery.

  • juliachild on Sep 28, 2011

    Great post

  • beingwell on Sep 28, 2011

    You’re very good.

  • pattiann on Oct 2, 2011

    Fantastic

  • DHEERUMT on Oct 2, 2011

    You have a great taste. It feels different when I read your posts.

  • binyumanyun on Oct 5, 2011

    what a wonderful stuff

  • CHIPMUNK on Oct 12, 2011

    Wow!!

  • magus magus on Oct 17, 2011

    niceeeeeeeeeeeeee

  • FX777222999 on Oct 22, 2011

    Revisiting this heart-stopping poem.

  • FX777222999 on Dec 11, 2011

    Okay you’re dead but beloved by friends?

  • nurzaira on Dec 26, 2011

    wow

  • Vinaya says good bye on Feb 4, 2012

    You are not dead, your reality is outgrowing inside me.

  • Lelorbh on Feb 12, 2012

    Poets shouldn’t be goth, they should be happy.. Nonetheless, 4/5 ;)

  • Aroosa Gloomy on Feb 12, 2012

    Honey I’m pessimist.Poets are never happy.Sorrows make someone to write like this.

  • ebasearticles on Feb 27, 2012

    nice shared

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