My response to the unofficial Triond Forum Writing Challenge – Round 6, in which something is to be written using LEAF and SILENT TONGUE.

This was it. This was the reason I went on this perilous journey. This was the only way I could win back the love of my life from a man with more money, style, muscle, intelligence, wit, hair, and compassion. I took no pause and rushed deep into the womb of the gaping cave. There at its end, perched before a cervical looking mound was a giant skull peering back at me. It had pink diamonds embedded in its eye sockets, and green rubies filled its nose cavity. I knelt down and French kissed the demon skull. Instantly the jaw snapped shut, grasping my tongue in a vice like grip. I screamed and tried to pull away but I could not. I struggled and thrashed and it seemed like the whole cave was vibrating with me. Rocks began to tumble from the roof and dust bellowed all around me. All I could see were those pink diamond eyes that seemed to glow with a fire of unresolved lust and which held me in utter contempt. I pulled and pulled and eventually the skull let me go and without the slightest hesitation I sprinted out of the cave as it collapsed behind me in a giant crashing moan.

I had barely survived with my life. I was covered in dust and debris so I licked the dirt from my face and behind my ears – licked! I couldn’t believe it. My tongue was now well over twelve inches long and had incredible muscular dexterity. I could even hold sticks and throw rocks with it. I had it seemed been granted the gift of the silent tongue. I could return home and again reclaim the love of my woman and hold the power of envy over all my small tongued brethren. I would from this time forward be known as The Licking God Duff D Onkalarkarage.

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  • Katie Marie on Jul 15, 2009

    Duff, what can I say. There are no words. I’d say I have a silent tongue but you’ve totally perverted that phrase for me.
    :-)

  • Deep Blue on Jul 15, 2009

    A really long story but well written. Duff’s way of writing always stands out from the rest.

  • kate smedley on Jul 15, 2009

    Well what can I say Licking God Duff, you’ve done it again ….I’ll never know where you get them from!

  • bwellman on Jul 15, 2009

    Wow, they weren’t lying- you really can please women – at least you’ve pleased this one. I laughed throughout the entire piece and am a much wiser person for having read it. Thank you o great one (oops I guess I should have used caps but I’m too lazy.)

  • Johanny Lisbeth on Jul 16, 2009

    wow!! you’re writing does stand out. love it!!

  • STEVE666 on Jul 16, 2009

    Apart from being totally mad and very funny, you are a bloody great writer, Duff.

  • clay hurtubise on Jul 17, 2009

    Great piece!
    Thanks,
    Clay

  • Ruby Hawk on Jul 17, 2009

    Duff, I get a good belly laugh from your articles. There are just no words to describe your style but its a cool fresh breeze to my mundane mind.

  • RS Wing on Jul 18, 2009

    You crazy, crazy man. I wholeheartedly agree with Ruby, and your tales are a great source of amusement to me. You have a very Hunter S. Thompson tone, but a very unique style of brandishing your humor and embrace these challenges with great vigor. I often re-visit your literary works and still find something else to laugh about within the piece. Very original and drop dead hilarious. I will re-visit this piece often. Thank you very much for the amusement and wish you well.

  • BradONeill on Jul 19, 2009

    Ha Duffster that was pure genius! again the mystical Gods of Triond that decide the fate of all of us have allowed a true gem to pass! Maybe they laid off the church ladies and are going to allow great fiction to flow once again!

  • David Crerand on Jul 19, 2009

    very funny and spellbinding at the same time. Good stuff, Duff.

  • HelloSiti on Jul 20, 2009

    How if that word “pig” becoming “koala”, that probably will be nicer?

  • cafftee on Jul 20, 2009

    Well done Duff, that was very entertaining!

  • littlemama76 on Jul 20, 2009

    hi great read i loved it

  • oldster on Jul 20, 2009

    Great storyline and a very snappy pace.

  • Darla Cooke on Jul 20, 2009

    Wow! This is a great story!

  • Alistair Briggs on Jul 20, 2009

    Very high standard of writing as usual :)

  • Mark Gordon Brown on Jul 21, 2009

    heck of a tale man, this is my first time in the Challenge and it was great.

  • Brenda Nelson on Jul 21, 2009

    Well that was entirely different and unexpected.

  • Butterfly Musings on Jul 21, 2009

    another bit of genius writing from you, excellent

  • Morgana on Jul 22, 2009

    Your imagination is absurd and insanely good :) I enjoyed this story very much. By the way, you’re nasty!!1 :P

  • Mikayla on Jul 29, 2009

    Indiana Jones..eat your heart out!!. The Licking God Duff D Onkalarkarage aka Gene Simmons..hehehehahaha..this was the ultimate in perilous jungle adventures and hostile natives story..this is arguably one of your best mate.

  • S A JOHNSON on Jul 31, 2009

    LMAO! Wow…

  • Mila Marcos on Dec 17, 2009

    :-) No wonder Onkalarkarage is your bestest mythological character LMAO! He’s now mine!!

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