I need you in my band.

Allison,
I love this. This is really beautiful. If you have the music to this, you should record it on a CD and send it here to Triond so we can hear it. Excellent Lyrics!!! Keep up the great work!!! I can’t wait to read some more of your content!!!!!!

Randy

great song! just put my own tune to it!

Very nice, I loved it.

Great stuff! Bring some more.

Very cool I would so use these lyrics in my band if I wrote them

Awsum! thanks for sharing!

i love it, its beautiful. U should read some of mine and give me some feedback if u will. thanx

Allison that is wonderful lyrics. You need to be still writing for a band or better yet still in a band. Great work! Its heartfelt

Allison:

Wonderfully open lyrics with a leanin’ toward country/rock me thinks. Loved the theme and the finishing lyrics.

That is a wonderful song. It describes how alot of us feel.

Very nice I will getto work on the music to go with it

Hi, Allison, how are you?
This quite a darkly curious piece. It has an uneasy, unsatisfied feel to it. Good job. Thanks for sharing.

Great lyrics, but it would be better if you could upload the song in Triond too

I agree with many other comments, would be nice to listen these lyrics with the music.

nice article

Allison, bravo! “Tell Me” reeks of honesty and the desire to be set free, but yet not at our own independent free will–the truth we know from within. I like this very much. Sometimes Allison we just want to hear it first before we move on. This is a break out song that perhaps will sooth the hearts of so many who are teetering on choices and decisions that we must ultimately make but just a little too afraid to do so. I can’t wait until I hear your lyrics with its complete musical dressings. Good! Good! Good!

i really love your style. i can so relate to this poem..keep up the great work.

nice words! really meaningful, seems like you read some old thoughts of mine!

Great stuff! and nicely put

Great flow and rhythm, i really liked it. Its an excellent way to put a truth into words.I looked at your profile, and I am also looking for feedback on my short story.

Wow this is good. I’m looking forward to reading more!

This is a beautifully written piece with powerful emotions.

Take Care,

Joanna Maharis

this is really good you have a lot of talnet and you should use it anywhere and everywhere, good luck to you, and I hope the best for you.

this is really great…very heart felt. I’m glad I read it.

Beautifully written song . I look forward to your next one!

nice lyrics maybe sound beautiful when heard ..lovely

i always like posts that make you FEEL! well done.

I like it. It sounds so familiar but I can’t put my finger on it. Very nice.

I love this i dont kno i mean KNow if i already commented but this is sooo good.Its really emotional.My friends would say this is emo or crap but i LIKE it!! =D

I’m new to this site but not to writing. I loved it. If it\’s not too much to ask can you read my writing and poetry?

How nice!

I like it!!!

Very good lyrics

Very cool.

Very nice. I enjoyed reading this piece.

Great song! I love it. Thanks for sharing!

You have cut to the heart, no dilution here.

very nice : )

Allison,

This poem is very much like the teen poems on WikiQuestions to which I sent my poems until discovering this site.
One can see straight away the accomplished poet that you are. Though “Tell Me” is not a new theme I have enjoyed reading it very much and I congratulate you on tour ability to write such lyrics.

I do have favor to ask my dear (I am 78 so perhaps I may be able to get away with saying my dear???). I have submitted my first two poems to this site under the name of Robert Harrison and your evaluation would be much appreciated if you have the time.
Please forgive me for being so forward, and believe me I am not seeking for the opportunity for everyone to read my humble efforts.

My respects to you poet.

R Harrison.

wow…great work…what happened to your singing? you should follow up your talent. you have only one life time to live, so you should leave no stone un-turned. Please, give it a shot. this is exactly what i was write about, if you could take a look at my work.

I love it. It realy hits on the buttons about younge adult conflictions and the inability to find ones worth.

i loved this… nice work

Great job. Stay encouraged.

Subhaanallaah! Unbelievable everyone love poetry! Great!
Don’t forget also see my poetry OK?
I have made many poetries but rarely people see them. Would you like to heal my pain?

Come on also see Cyberneverty’s articles for instance in www. bukisa.com/r/cyberneverty via internet HP/ Laptop/Notebook/Internet Shop(Tell your friends, plz!) Your view is precious for me!

Excellent! You can really feel the anxiety & the despair pushing forward to the sound of the clock.

I would appreciate it best if I will be able to hear you sing it…

Best regards and keep reading,
2tet

nice

this is relly meaningful to me my sister is truly blind to the truth and i wish i had the guts to tell her what i think

Great

I like the underlying idea of just coming right out and telling people what you think.

Very good.

Your a great poet I like your stlye

nice job!

cool poem and cool style, i really enjoyed it.

I love this poem because you can feel the depth of the authors mind state.Very well expressed.

God bless.

You are a brilliant song writer. Would love to hear the music.

my son plays the piano i bet he can play it if he hear you sing and i would be back up lol

I’ve really enjoyed everything that I have read on your site. Thank you very much for sharing your work. Would you be so kind as to give me your honest opinion of the little poem that I posted. I have never written for others, and couldn’t if I tried. I haven’t an education for writing. I only write what comes to my head as it comes to my head. I would like to know how they sound in other peoples’ heads. If you don’t like it that is alright too. I just wonder how other people hear them,and believe that the quickest way to find out is to ask. Thanks again for sharing your work, and please cotinue to post. I will be sending everyone that I meet to this site

I just found you today. I am SO enjoying your writing.

I read your lyrics again and I still like them. I bet you have written some good songs.

U got magic in your words Allison…

Thank you for this beautiful song, am pretty new in this site but I have found your work and am enjoying it. You are very talented.

Very well written.I can almost hear the lyrics!

I would love to hear that song

So honest and so obviously written from the heart, thank you for sharing yourself.

Good writing !!! I could see this song with music.
Keep up the magic for you have a gift.

This is great. I love your poetry.

nice…i wish i could here it as the song*S*

Amazing!

I enjoyed the poetic flow and like Coker said I wish I could hear the tune that goes with it. “Nicely done”.

This piece is very well written. I think that if it stood alone as a poem then it would need to be a bit less abstract; however, as lyrics potentially set to a perfect tune – you are spot on. I enjoyed reading this song and look forward to reading more.

Hi Allison! This is a wonderful piece! Hope to hear from you again in SU. We miss you

Beautiful, I enjoy reading that which is so obviously heartfelt.

Wish I could hear you sing that!

Hello, Allison Jae,

Very nice work here…keep up the good work!

See you around!

-Fresh Writing

It’s really great, enjoyed reading. I want your opinion about my writing, drop a line or too. I’ll check you soon…

My fiction writing at the following link:

http://is.gd/nziV

I like this being in a band and a singer I love to read lyrics a lot. They are truly poetic as well.

Simon and Paula must be jealous with you, they can only give critics but never create any single song!!!!

But I…

…Girl you should know that I’m that painting that’s gonna take you to real life.
I’ll be that music you like in the silence.
That dryness when you’re all wet.
That soft bed when you can’t sleep.
The sweet in your bitter mix of herbs.
I’ll be the verb when you can’t move.
Girl, that proof in your blind faith.
The taste when your tonge is numb,Girl
I’ll be the rum in your non-toxic drink.
Think of it;Baby
I’ll be that kink in your smooth sexy walk.
That hawk stalking your rodent just to kiss.
That blits to your drug free status.
That blunt to your conservitiveness.
The burn in your chest after you drink mylanta.
I’ll be the planter that cultivates your desert.
The best hurt you ever felt while smiling.
I’ll be the style even in your crimpled piece of metal.
Girl, I am that little devil that’s gonna take you to heaven…

steebar1@hotmail.com

i wish i have a band and i wish i have you to write lyrics for that

This really would be fine set to music.

Yes this is very nice, and you sent to me through stumble, answer to your comment, don’t know why it got so many comments, I think it can be taken is two ways, first, is because you have captured what the mind continues to think while we even try to sleep, words that are unspoken, but heard? Second, to me, it also can be like, the one who lays there beside you, does he have a secret to let out, to tell you about, and your wanting it either spoken, or to not let your mind think of it?

And yes, I can see how it would astounding if put to music…

Telling love words.

I love it!! it is a cool song!♥

I’m 85th comment lol. I didn’t know were in a band. Really cool. Love the lyrics.

it can be seen clearly that you have pretty good sense to language. i mean, literally. you can compose each word into a good lyric. however, you should put the music together within so we can see how good your song is. and it seems like many comments have the same thought as mine, why don’t you take the music on and bring it to us? lol

Cool song. Really enjoyed it.

it sound is grate and its grate song, if this song is in audio or video it come rock and rock but its also rock here its comment number 88 and i hope it will complete 100 or more comments, keep it up dear,

regard
john smeth

This verse is very good. The author use the new linguistic methods to write it.

Very good song. Thank you

Waaao!! thats a fantastic song and lyrics… i loved this song very much…Thanks for sharing.

Romantic! makes me smile..

Romantic lyrics! makes me smile, love indeed makes a person poetic.

Great collection of words to form a music…Hope to hear the lyrics comes alive in your next post.

Properly Really easy to implement articulate I found myself wafting here and there on internet, when you are extra good luck in my closet, i am grateful partner.

Marvellous

Wow,what a song? I really like it.Thanks for sharing with us.

wow, Marvelous poem..i like it..thanks for sharing..keep it come.

very nice this post i like it very much thanx u share this post…….

Thanks for providing these helpful information keep it up and every time provide all of needful info and i have a grate site about english video songs and i wish you should be like my blog

I can’t really set a tune for it. Maybe I’m not as musically inclined as you are though.

Thanks for sharing such valuable information.Keep posting such great info for us thanks

I like the lyrics. Thanks for sharing it

Nice song lyric

the lyrics are awesome! thanks a lot! you are a great writer!

I can easily relate myself with this poem.