So far so good, although I wonder why Christina would be so affectionate one moment and so livid and angry the next. In any case, she seems to view the situation as an ISFJ, someone who’d have a lot of common mental ground with Autumn the INFJ.

hi
I’m a fan of sci fi–
the dialogue is good, but too much is said–needs to shift scenes instead of standing there talking back & forth–makes it stagey–soap operaish–needs some action–
there’s intrigue–but seems too complex to follow–needs to be simpler–a bit of male/female conflict/interaction–needs to be played up or resolved in future episodes–there are some slang terms–that has to be explained–the background–where scene takes place–needs to be described–
all in all–good–sci fi courtroom drama possibitlities

I don’t agree, avant. Not all science fiction is action-oriented all the time; indeed a lot of the very best has revolved heavily around dialogue (e.g., Michael Crichton’s THE ANDROMEDA STRAIN, many of Larry Niven’s novels, etc.).

In the real world, in order for men of action to do their work properly men of thoughtfulness often need to talk things through first. And some of the most important warfare is psychological warfare. Science fiction deals with this too.

Really this is broader than “science fiction”. Jason is writing fan fiction about a speculative fiction multiverse (mine) than can and does take in every level of human (and non-human) drama.