Follow the story of Treydon Austin (aka Smokey) as he chases down the cleverest, fastest, most uncatchable, most unmatchable members of The Bandit’s crime Syndicate as the government’s secret weapon against guys who are just too fast to catch. Check back every monday for the latest chapter to this fast paced action novel.

          “Yeah,” I said, “my dad had this old motor in his Chevelle. The big block just has so much torque you know?”

          “Yeah I know. My dad has a 396 in his old Chevy truck, that thing hauls”

          “So do I.” I said. I threw the Turbo 400 transmission into reverse and burned out. I swung out of the parking spot, I threw it in drive, burned out again and we were off.

          I took her down to 7th East. I liked that street because it was big, wide, and it didn’t get really busy until about five o’ clock. I was at the first stop light; I dropped the transmission into L. The 1978 Camaro owners manual said that L stood for ‘Low’ I knew it stood for ‘Lift Off.’ Dixie looked at me. “It looks fast, it feels fast, but is it really fast?”

I laughed and said, “Define fast.”

          The light changed and I gassed it, you could feel the front end of the car wanting to lift up and take off like a rocket. The tachometer climbed to six thousand and I slapped the shifter into 2nd. We were going fifty miles an hour and climbing, and then we were going sixty, seventy, Shift to 3rd, eighty-five, and the speedometer was buried, you could hear that speed gauge over revving inside my dash board.  Oh yeah, we were flying.

          The light in front of us turned yellow. Dixie was laughing loudly, “Your not gunna make it” she said.

          Before I could even say, ‘I bet I will’ we were through the light. I started to slow down. I exhaled, I had been holding my breath, so was Dixie, she exhaled too and said, “That… was fast.”

          We pulled up to the next light. On the passenger side of me was what looked like a mid nineties Honda Prelude. It was hard to tell because it was so loaded up with a body kit, a gigantic spoiler and a coffee can sized exhaust tip which served no purpose other than to make the car even more obnoxious. It was cobalt blue with what looked like a sticker of a dragon on the side. He also had twenty-six inch rims, which is another thing that served no purpose other than to make the car even more obnoxious. He revved his engine, oh yeah, that was a four cylinder. He unrolled his window. He had a shaved head and a tattoo of a dragon on his arm. He looked pretty buff; I wouldn’t want to mess with him. His car maybe… but not him.

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  • kourtney on Sep 25, 2009

    i like this story a lot…. :)

  • RJ Walker on Sep 26, 2009

    Thank you kourtney:D haha

  • jonathon on Oct 12, 2009

    The father’s death scene was super intense. Contact me over at cardomain if you want my constructive criticism.

    ~blackcompany

  • RJ Walker on Oct 14, 2009

    will do!

  • Ryanjayx on Nov 7, 2009

    I’m so mad that I came into the story this early. I feel like I NEED to finish it tonight. Very good story. You’ve got me hooked.

  • RJ Walker on Nov 7, 2009

    i’ll be posting 3 chapters on here this sunday. so keep checking back. i have already written the whole thing, i’m just reading it, fixing some minor stuff, then posting it which is why its going kinda slow. yeah, check back on sunday cuz i’ve got 3 chapters done.

  • Ryanjayx on Nov 7, 2009

    Ha ha, thanks man. I love the story. Is any of this based on your real life?

  • RJ Walker on Nov 8, 2009

    absolutly freaking none of it. hahahahaha. at first the main character was gunna have a trans am, but i have a Camaro myself so i thought i would do that cuz i have more experience with it. and thats about it i would say. though some character personalities are based on some people i know. just a lazy way of making characters lol. oh, and i am really an EMT and i work out in a place called Wendover which is a small gambling city by the Salt Flats, so there is a little experience there is guess.

  • RJ Walker on Nov 8, 2009

    but the street racers really do meet on 45th and state every satruday night when the raceway is closed hahaha that much is non fiction

  • RJ Walker on Dec 8, 2009

    meh. changed my mind. lots of this was inspired by real events and has been exaggerated so much you would never guess hahahahahaha

  • Paladin on Jan 20, 2010

    I like the story – you are not a bad writer. IMO, the story was really dragged down by cliche, plot twists that were entirely expected, and superfluousness. I mean, a car that can do 250mph all day long, bash through obstacles without getting a scratch, off-road like a rock crawler, and shoot EMP fields? A protagonist who can out-drive a NASCAR champion, out-shoot a Marshall crackshot, strip his car down to the frame and rebuild it in a weekend – for fun, and is basically perfect and faultless in every respect is pretty difficult for most readers to relate to. Some of your descriptions require a lot of car knowledge to understand, which will lose you some readers. And I’ll be honest, every time I read the names “Smokey” and “Bandit,” I groaned.

    Aside from those little issues, great short story! Advice for your next one: more human protagonist, more creative names, and proof read! Keep up the good work.

  • RJ Walker on Jan 21, 2010

    you are absolutely right. thanks for the feedback. there was a TON of cliches all over. i recognized this after i wrote it. and the rediculousness was WAAAYYY to rediculous. makes me laugh a little actually. glad you enjoyed it. i wouldn\’t call it a short story though. novella maybe. hahaha 375 pages is a tidge long for a short story. i honestly think that it would make a better graphic novel if i were to ever redo it. i\’m on my 18th proofread and i just suck at it. i\’m always gunna miss junk. thanks for letting me know there is still more to fix.

    for something a little less cliche, and not quite as long, check out the short story i wrote. its a little more sociological than this, and a lot less cliched, but i\’m not going to say its cliche free. i don\’t think anyone can escape cliche no matter what. Especially with car type stories. lol fast and furious for example.

    anyway, for less cliche, more sociological quandry, and a lot less superflousness, check out the Bio-Guard story, by me, in the short stories section.

  • Lee T on Feb 4, 2010

    Liked your story! Hope there will be a sequel. Sounds like a lot of different films and books into one story. If you write a sequel I would surely read it! Thumbs up!

  • RJ Walker on Feb 4, 2010

    Glad you enjoyed it. i have written up the outline for the sequel, but have not started it yet.

  • TheKickinKoupe on Feb 5, 2010

    I loved your story it was a relief from all the old boring car books
    when was this written?
    are you planning on making a second novel?
    I love how it was Chevy related and not ford.
    This book rocked

  • Daniel on Feb 8, 2010

    A few mistakes, after your character pulled over Dixie you write ‘about a month later…’ then after the letter from the Marshall you say ‘what a day, first Dixie now this.’
    Crazy Earl, you changed his name to Sean for two sentences then back to Earl.
    Also a few spelling errors, I noticed collage, Im pretty sure you meant college. I dont recall where in the story that was but it was toward the beginning. There are a few more, I cant remember them all but theyre in the first 5 chapters.
    I only read through the first 11 chapters. Ill try to come finish the rest tomorrow. So far, it aint bad.

  • RJ Walker on Feb 9, 2010

    GAH! i swore i took care of those. i think i fixed em in the actual document but not on the online copy. i’ll check that out. thanks a whole bunch daniel. i’ll have to look it over for the 100,000,001th time. haha

    And thank you KickinKoupe for your feedback. Not that i have anything against ford though. i just have more experience with chevy cuz chevy freaking rocks. Its the reason i chose camaro for the main character over Trans-Am. i just have more experience with a camaro… besides the fact that pontiac is, sadly, toast.
    I have the plot and character outlines all written for the sequal, but i haven’t started actually writing it. I started this book February 2009. I published it in like, october i think. it still needs work. it will always need some tweak here or there. THANKS EVERYONE FOR FEEDBACK!

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