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         “Listen to Dr. Charlston, he knows what he is doing. I will visit you every day I promise.”

         “How will I know if you keep your promise?”

         “You’re just going to have to have faith that I will.”

         “But…”

         “Here,” Smokey reached into his pocket and pulled out the charm that Dixie had made for him. The keychain that read Dixie & Treydon.

         “You can trust me more than anyone Dixie.”

          Dixie clasped the polished stone in her hand. She held it up to her eyes and examined it.

         “I do trust you…”

         “I’ll be back tomorrow. You can count on it.” Smokey winked at her and stroked his hand through her hair once. He was torn into pieces by Dixie’s state. He left the room quietly. “She’s all yours doc. You had better take care of her.”

         “I’ll do more than my best” Dr. Charlston assured.

         Smokey nodded and walked down the hall and back into the elevator. He needed to go to his room, and be alone. He needed to think about what he had to do. The Bandit was gone, so he felt like there was nothing left.

         He rode the elevator up the residential floor. He walked down the lonely middle hall and located his room. He glanced behind him at the door with the nametag on it. He read the nametag over and over again. Dixie Dawn… Dixie Dawn… Dixie Dawn…

         He shook it off and opened the door to his room. He unzipped his jump suit to make himself more comfortable. He walked into the living room and plopped down on the couch.         

         A voice came from behind him. “You got him eh?” Smokey jumped. It was John Clark.

         “How long have you been in here?” Smokey asked.

         “Since I heard you went to take down the Bandit by yourself you stupid kid. That was reckless and idiotic… nice job.”

         “Thank you.”

         “We aren’t done here you know.”

         “What do you mean? I took out the Bandit. Took the king from the board. Check mate. Done. We win.”

         “Maybe you are forgetting what I told you about escalation. They get a super speed crime lord, we get an ultra speed cop. We get an ultra speed cop…”

         Smokey knew he was right. He sighed, “The Bandit was the easy one, wasn’t he?”

         “Most likely. We will see when the time comes though. The media has blown you into a superstar in case you didn’t know. You made headline news in all the papers when you stopped Ice Man and revealed the truth behind Nogales. My hope is that people will be too afraid to try to go up against you. My fear is that criminals will try to copycat you. For now though, just write up your report and give it to me when you can.”

         Smokey lowered his head, “Alright, I’ll get you that report at the end of next week.”

         “I’ll be on my way then.” John said. He turned, and exited Smokey’s apartment room.

         Smokey hung his head in deep thought. What could he do?  He was going to have to find a way to help Dixie remember. His worry however, was that the loss of her memories included the loss of him…

         As for escalation, that was the furthest thing from Smokey’s mind. It was time he took a vacation. He was going to spend that vacation with Dixie, trying to heal the scars that she had suffered from.

           Then he realized how he would do it. “I’ll give ya a report alright,” he said to himself. He sat down at his computer and began to type. “A report that starts with my first car in high school, and a girl who asked for a ride.”

THE END LADIES AND GENTLEMEN

OR IS IT…

EPILOUGE

         The young man opened the envelope. “Well, well.” He said, “Harry, check this out.”

         “What?” Harry said curiously.

         “Its from my dear sweet uncle Ren. AKA Mr. bigshot Bandit.”

         “What’s he say?”

         “Well, according to this, he ain’t sayin’ much lately. He kicked the bucket.” The young man laughed, “Serves him right for killin’ my dad…”

         “Yeah… I guess.” Harry said awkwardly, trying to avoid the subject.

         “Whelp! Guess that makes me the next one.” Said the young man, slamming the paper down on the hood of his recent project car.

         “The next what?”

         “Guess that makes me the next Bandit,” said the Bandit.

*author note*

SPECIAL THANKS!

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and a big thanks to all the readers!

FEEDBACK PLEASE!

Leave any questions, comments, or slander in the comments box, or even email me.

I really really really want the feedback. Oh, and if you pick up any errors let me know. there is always at least a few no matter how many times i go over it.

You can contact the author at waspcamaro@gmail.com

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  • kourtney on Sep 25, 2009

    i like this story a lot…. :)

  • RJ Walker on Sep 26, 2009

    Thank you kourtney:D haha

  • jonathon on Oct 12, 2009

    The father’s death scene was super intense. Contact me over at cardomain if you want my constructive criticism.

    ~blackcompany

  • RJ Walker on Oct 14, 2009

    will do!

  • Ryanjayx on Nov 7, 2009

    I’m so mad that I came into the story this early. I feel like I NEED to finish it tonight. Very good story. You’ve got me hooked.

  • RJ Walker on Nov 7, 2009

    i’ll be posting 3 chapters on here this sunday. so keep checking back. i have already written the whole thing, i’m just reading it, fixing some minor stuff, then posting it which is why its going kinda slow. yeah, check back on sunday cuz i’ve got 3 chapters done.

  • Ryanjayx on Nov 7, 2009

    Ha ha, thanks man. I love the story. Is any of this based on your real life?

  • RJ Walker on Nov 8, 2009

    absolutly freaking none of it. hahahahaha. at first the main character was gunna have a trans am, but i have a Camaro myself so i thought i would do that cuz i have more experience with it. and thats about it i would say. though some character personalities are based on some people i know. just a lazy way of making characters lol. oh, and i am really an EMT and i work out in a place called Wendover which is a small gambling city by the Salt Flats, so there is a little experience there is guess.

  • RJ Walker on Nov 8, 2009

    but the street racers really do meet on 45th and state every satruday night when the raceway is closed hahaha that much is non fiction

  • RJ Walker on Dec 8, 2009

    meh. changed my mind. lots of this was inspired by real events and has been exaggerated so much you would never guess hahahahahaha

  • Paladin on Jan 20, 2010

    I like the story – you are not a bad writer. IMO, the story was really dragged down by cliche, plot twists that were entirely expected, and superfluousness. I mean, a car that can do 250mph all day long, bash through obstacles without getting a scratch, off-road like a rock crawler, and shoot EMP fields? A protagonist who can out-drive a NASCAR champion, out-shoot a Marshall crackshot, strip his car down to the frame and rebuild it in a weekend – for fun, and is basically perfect and faultless in every respect is pretty difficult for most readers to relate to. Some of your descriptions require a lot of car knowledge to understand, which will lose you some readers. And I’ll be honest, every time I read the names “Smokey” and “Bandit,” I groaned.

    Aside from those little issues, great short story! Advice for your next one: more human protagonist, more creative names, and proof read! Keep up the good work.

  • RJ Walker on Jan 21, 2010

    you are absolutely right. thanks for the feedback. there was a TON of cliches all over. i recognized this after i wrote it. and the rediculousness was WAAAYYY to rediculous. makes me laugh a little actually. glad you enjoyed it. i wouldn\’t call it a short story though. novella maybe. hahaha 375 pages is a tidge long for a short story. i honestly think that it would make a better graphic novel if i were to ever redo it. i\’m on my 18th proofread and i just suck at it. i\’m always gunna miss junk. thanks for letting me know there is still more to fix.

    for something a little less cliche, and not quite as long, check out the short story i wrote. its a little more sociological than this, and a lot less cliched, but i\’m not going to say its cliche free. i don\’t think anyone can escape cliche no matter what. Especially with car type stories. lol fast and furious for example.

    anyway, for less cliche, more sociological quandry, and a lot less superflousness, check out the Bio-Guard story, by me, in the short stories section.

  • Lee T on Feb 4, 2010

    Liked your story! Hope there will be a sequel. Sounds like a lot of different films and books into one story. If you write a sequel I would surely read it! Thumbs up!

  • RJ Walker on Feb 4, 2010

    Glad you enjoyed it. i have written up the outline for the sequel, but have not started it yet.

  • TheKickinKoupe on Feb 5, 2010

    I loved your story it was a relief from all the old boring car books
    when was this written?
    are you planning on making a second novel?
    I love how it was Chevy related and not ford.
    This book rocked

  • Daniel on Feb 8, 2010

    A few mistakes, after your character pulled over Dixie you write ‘about a month later…’ then after the letter from the Marshall you say ‘what a day, first Dixie now this.’
    Crazy Earl, you changed his name to Sean for two sentences then back to Earl.
    Also a few spelling errors, I noticed collage, Im pretty sure you meant college. I dont recall where in the story that was but it was toward the beginning. There are a few more, I cant remember them all but theyre in the first 5 chapters.
    I only read through the first 11 chapters. Ill try to come finish the rest tomorrow. So far, it aint bad.

  • RJ Walker on Feb 9, 2010

    GAH! i swore i took care of those. i think i fixed em in the actual document but not on the online copy. i’ll check that out. thanks a whole bunch daniel. i’ll have to look it over for the 100,000,001th time. haha

    And thank you KickinKoupe for your feedback. Not that i have anything against ford though. i just have more experience with chevy cuz chevy freaking rocks. Its the reason i chose camaro for the main character over Trans-Am. i just have more experience with a camaro… besides the fact that pontiac is, sadly, toast.
    I have the plot and character outlines all written for the sequal, but i haven’t started actually writing it. I started this book February 2009. I published it in like, october i think. it still needs work. it will always need some tweak here or there. THANKS EVERYONE FOR FEEDBACK!

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