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          In the 1970 Chevelle SS there was the motor called the 396 Big Block. This was a big motor, and a fast one too. Put a supercharger on one of those and you would be doing wheelies off the line.

          We had a wooden canopy my dad made next to our trailer. We called it “the garage.” It was hot in the Utah summer and cold in the Utah winter, but hey, at least we didn’t get wet in the rain. Well, at least we didn’t get totally wet. The roof in that warped, shanty garage leaked pretty badly. Sometimes I think we spent more time on top of that thing working on it than we spent working on my Camaro or my dad’s old blue 1969 Ford truck inside of it.

          I remember pulling the Camaro into that shantytown garage for the first time. I had some trouble because it had no power steering or power breaks, but I managed. I got out of the car and said, “Are you sure dad? Its pretty beat up.”

          He looked at me and smiled “So am I, but you don’t see me complainin’ like your mom did ‘fore she up and left,” he said jokingly.

          We started taking off the fenders and little by little. We had the car taken completely apart. It took 2 weeks in all to completely dismember that old Chevy. I had worked on the car all night by myself. Dad had to work, he didn’t make much at the old mechanic shop, but it was just enough to make a living. Well… almost. He was in some pretty big debt still. I was worried they might reposes the trailer we lived in, it was actually a nice trailer, nicer than the ones around it anyway. It was big and black; it had 2 bedrooms and 1 bathroom with a full size bathtub and shower. I liked that place.

          I turned the wrench and turned it again, and again, and again. My arm was getting sore from turning it so many times. I didn’t really have that many friends, I just kind of kept to myself. There was only three things I ever did, and they were school, work, and Camaro. Eating and sleeping came during one of those three things. I had straight A’s even though I slept through most of my classes. I did especially well in classes like auto mechanics and human biology. I guess the reason I did so well in my auto class was because I actually worked on a car. Most of the kids in that class were still working on the “righty tighty–lefty loosey” concept. Every shop day I would bring in my Camaro and the other kids would bring in the Audi daddy bought them for their birthday. I would rebuild my carburetor and put on a vortex intake, while they would wash their A4 or their VW Jetta.

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  • kourtney on Sep 25, 2009

    i like this story a lot…. :)

  • RJ Walker on Sep 26, 2009

    Thank you kourtney:D haha

  • jonathon on Oct 12, 2009

    The father’s death scene was super intense. Contact me over at cardomain if you want my constructive criticism.

    ~blackcompany

  • RJ Walker on Oct 14, 2009

    will do!

  • Ryanjayx on Nov 7, 2009

    I’m so mad that I came into the story this early. I feel like I NEED to finish it tonight. Very good story. You’ve got me hooked.

  • RJ Walker on Nov 7, 2009

    i’ll be posting 3 chapters on here this sunday. so keep checking back. i have already written the whole thing, i’m just reading it, fixing some minor stuff, then posting it which is why its going kinda slow. yeah, check back on sunday cuz i’ve got 3 chapters done.

  • Ryanjayx on Nov 7, 2009

    Ha ha, thanks man. I love the story. Is any of this based on your real life?

  • RJ Walker on Nov 8, 2009

    absolutly freaking none of it. hahahahaha. at first the main character was gunna have a trans am, but i have a Camaro myself so i thought i would do that cuz i have more experience with it. and thats about it i would say. though some character personalities are based on some people i know. just a lazy way of making characters lol. oh, and i am really an EMT and i work out in a place called Wendover which is a small gambling city by the Salt Flats, so there is a little experience there is guess.

  • RJ Walker on Nov 8, 2009

    but the street racers really do meet on 45th and state every satruday night when the raceway is closed hahaha that much is non fiction

  • RJ Walker on Dec 8, 2009

    meh. changed my mind. lots of this was inspired by real events and has been exaggerated so much you would never guess hahahahahaha

  • Paladin on Jan 20, 2010

    I like the story – you are not a bad writer. IMO, the story was really dragged down by cliche, plot twists that were entirely expected, and superfluousness. I mean, a car that can do 250mph all day long, bash through obstacles without getting a scratch, off-road like a rock crawler, and shoot EMP fields? A protagonist who can out-drive a NASCAR champion, out-shoot a Marshall crackshot, strip his car down to the frame and rebuild it in a weekend – for fun, and is basically perfect and faultless in every respect is pretty difficult for most readers to relate to. Some of your descriptions require a lot of car knowledge to understand, which will lose you some readers. And I’ll be honest, every time I read the names “Smokey” and “Bandit,” I groaned.

    Aside from those little issues, great short story! Advice for your next one: more human protagonist, more creative names, and proof read! Keep up the good work.

  • RJ Walker on Jan 21, 2010

    you are absolutely right. thanks for the feedback. there was a TON of cliches all over. i recognized this after i wrote it. and the rediculousness was WAAAYYY to rediculous. makes me laugh a little actually. glad you enjoyed it. i wouldn\’t call it a short story though. novella maybe. hahaha 375 pages is a tidge long for a short story. i honestly think that it would make a better graphic novel if i were to ever redo it. i\’m on my 18th proofread and i just suck at it. i\’m always gunna miss junk. thanks for letting me know there is still more to fix.

    for something a little less cliche, and not quite as long, check out the short story i wrote. its a little more sociological than this, and a lot less cliched, but i\’m not going to say its cliche free. i don\’t think anyone can escape cliche no matter what. Especially with car type stories. lol fast and furious for example.

    anyway, for less cliche, more sociological quandry, and a lot less superflousness, check out the Bio-Guard story, by me, in the short stories section.

  • Lee T on Feb 4, 2010

    Liked your story! Hope there will be a sequel. Sounds like a lot of different films and books into one story. If you write a sequel I would surely read it! Thumbs up!

  • RJ Walker on Feb 4, 2010

    Glad you enjoyed it. i have written up the outline for the sequel, but have not started it yet.

  • TheKickinKoupe on Feb 5, 2010

    I loved your story it was a relief from all the old boring car books
    when was this written?
    are you planning on making a second novel?
    I love how it was Chevy related and not ford.
    This book rocked

  • Daniel on Feb 8, 2010

    A few mistakes, after your character pulled over Dixie you write ‘about a month later…’ then after the letter from the Marshall you say ‘what a day, first Dixie now this.’
    Crazy Earl, you changed his name to Sean for two sentences then back to Earl.
    Also a few spelling errors, I noticed collage, Im pretty sure you meant college. I dont recall where in the story that was but it was toward the beginning. There are a few more, I cant remember them all but theyre in the first 5 chapters.
    I only read through the first 11 chapters. Ill try to come finish the rest tomorrow. So far, it aint bad.

  • RJ Walker on Feb 9, 2010

    GAH! i swore i took care of those. i think i fixed em in the actual document but not on the online copy. i’ll check that out. thanks a whole bunch daniel. i’ll have to look it over for the 100,000,001th time. haha

    And thank you KickinKoupe for your feedback. Not that i have anything against ford though. i just have more experience with chevy cuz chevy freaking rocks. Its the reason i chose camaro for the main character over Trans-Am. i just have more experience with a camaro… besides the fact that pontiac is, sadly, toast.
    I have the plot and character outlines all written for the sequal, but i haven’t started actually writing it. I started this book February 2009. I published it in like, october i think. it still needs work. it will always need some tweak here or there. THANKS EVERYONE FOR FEEDBACK!

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