Depicting Marianna childhood in Maine.

As far back as I can remember I was never truly young. Even as a small child I was always clouded by worry. This I found was my first advantage over humanity. It was an asset just waiting to be utilized, but the understanding came with age was born into me from the very beginning. Perhaps this was the reason I felt myself to be very old.

I was regressing. I felt myself going back. I heard my mother calling. Oh, how I loved to hear the sweet voice of Josephine Marx. She always referred to herself by that name as long as I had known her. Marriage had not cooled her sense of independence.

“Mary, it is time to come in now,” she said. Her voice to me sounded like a singing bird inspired by its muse. “Mary,” she called again.

“Yes, Mother,” I said.

As I approached the deck, my mother’s face had gone wild with fright seeing my mud-caked body.

“Mary, what have you done to yourself?” She scolded. Taking my hand, she said, “Come inside and get cleaned up. Your father is on his way back from the airport this very minute.”

“Who’s coming, Mother?” I asked, jumping up and down.

“It’s a surprise. Now, you go up with Anna and take your bath and put on some clean clothes.”

“Mother, please, tell.”

“No,” she said, pointing her forefinger at me, “now, scat.”

“It’s Uncle Martin, isn’t it?”

“Well, young lady, if you don’t get upstairs right and get cleaned up, you are going to miss his visit altogether.” I threw her a sour look as she pointed to the staircase.

“Stop the lecture, Mother. I’m going.” I stumped up the stairs a bit over-dramatically. Anna was waiting for me at the top.

It made me laugh to think how I could always drive my mother crazy with my relentless procrastination. Father always said it was a trait all genius children carried, and Roland Faigon happened to be an expert in the field, like every other piece of knowledge he shared. I was never one to question my father. His words always spoke like gospel to me that left my debating skills to my bouts with Mother.

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  • Moses Ingram on Aug 29, 2008

    Very interesting, I’m away to read part 2.

  • Kiki Stamatiou on Sep 3, 2008

    I like the way this part of the story draws the reader back to Mary’s times of innocence. She’s caught between pleasing her parents and pleasing herself.

    Take Care,

    Kiki Stamatiou (Joanna Maharis)

  • Verniel Cutar on Oct 24, 2008

    Awesome start for a novel!

  • Juancav on Oct 24, 2008

    Beautiful history,a 12 years old little girl ,wanted still being a child,but parents didn´´t understand her.

  • Keith in France on Dec 19, 2008

    A brilliant story and it makes for very good easy reading … ;)
    interesting how you have managed to capture it from a educated childs point of view …. missing out on there childhood ….. living the life of the Father ……
    (Who obviously wants whats best for her but gets too caught up in teaching her ……. trying to set out her future the way he wants it to be)
    Very good …… cannot wait to read more …… ;)

  • Jen on Feb 10, 2009

    Great chapter

  • Iva Carter on Mar 4, 2009

    You have a way of keeping the reader interested and engaged in the story. Chapter 1 is set up to inform the reader that something major is about to happen in Mary’s life that will change everything for her and possibly her family. As the reader is filled with that knowledge, curiosity sets in as to what the life-changing event will be. As a result, the reader is hooked. Great job!

  • Johanan Rakkav on Apr 10, 2009

    I found you via a comment you made to Leafygreens asking her to take a look at your writings. I’ve read this far to get a feel for this particular story line.

    I have some quarrels with two statements on your first page:

    > It made me laugh to think how I could always drive my mother crazy with my relentless procrastination. Father always said it was a trait all genius children carried, and Roland Faigon happened to be an expert in the field, like every other piece of knowledge he shared.

    > I would have laughed at her untruth, if I didn’t care so much about her feelings. How many times did I hear at the Institution for Higher Learning that all child geniuses were cold, arrogant and insensitive. True knowledge comes not from superiority, but from the understanding not only of how things work, but most importantly, how things feel.

    But neither of these things are true, or anything like it. First, procrastination is something (in terms of “cognitive dynamics”) that P personalities are subject to, but not Js. So for example, the rather zany ENFP personality type struggles with procrastination, but not the equally brilliant but opposite-polarity INFJ (nor even, say, ENFJ).

    Second, most child geniuses I’ve ever heard of (and I was one by all acknowledgements, as was my twin sister) are anything but cold, arrogant and insensitive. Again, personality type as it develops has to be taken into account, as does the poor child’s reactions to whatever influences surround him or her.

    Who is responsible for these distortions of fact? The author, unwittingly (begging your pardon)? The child? Her teachers? If one of the latter, I hope you’ll deal with the issue as you go, if you haven’t already.

    My own writing on Triond mostly concerns a child prodigy, an INFJ boy with great natural gifts and truly astounding supernatural potential. We meet him just as he turns 15 and watch him as he grows into young adulthood — and as he embraces step by step who and what he is and what he’s capable of doing at need. I’d be very interested in your reactions to him and to how I write about him.

    My reaction to your own writing style is that I appreciate it very much. You obviously strive for both clarity and vividness of vision, although I agree with some of the others here that the text needs some refinement in the technical details of grammar and punctuation. Getting the “flow” right in the narrative will solve much of that issue.

  • RS Wing on Jul 11, 2010

    Again, great imagery within your dialogue. Your prose is very fluid…clean and well contructed. I can personally relate to this –

    \\\”As far back as I can remember I was never truly young. Even as a small child I was always clouded by worry. This I found was my first advantage over humanity. It was an asset just waiting to be utilized, but the understanding came with age was born into me from the very beginning.\\\” – Great opening for this chapter 1.

    Fluid dialogue is very hard to right for me, so I see some real continuity within your prose as a whole. I\\\’m getting intrigued and wondering where all of this is heading considering the intro. Great work!

  • gaby7 on Nov 21, 2010

    Liked it!

  • Erin Miller on Jan 11, 2011

    Another amazing chapter to a great story. This book definitely has me hooked.

  • Ima Vee on Jan 28, 2011

    really great… be back on My Novel in Quazen… I’ll be reading the other chapters… This book really got me… :]

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