Depicting Marianna childhood in Maine.

Even with the coming of age I wondered if that girl ever really existed.

Aurora and I bid farewell to Richie at the stables that joined the meadows. All the way home Aurora couldn’t stop talking about Richie- from his bad manners to his dirty feet. I got the feeling Aurora’s complaints of Richie were masking deeper feelings.

Mother once told me about the hate masking love syndrome, but among twelve-year-old children I believed it to be a simple infatuation.

Aurora and were greeted at the front door by father’s stern face. “Hello, Father,” I said.

“Aurora,” he said, “if you will please excuse us.”

“Yes, Sir,” she said and quickly left the room.

He took my hand forcefully. “Come, Mary, we must speak.”

“Whatever you want, Father,” I said and followed him.

He led me into the parlor before releasing my hand. I saw the worry lines consuming my father’s forehead. “What’s wrong, Father?”

“You tell me,” he said. I didn’t answer in my ignorance of what he meant by those three little words. “Mary,” he continued, “you know you can talk to me. Tell me what’s wrong.”

“What could be wrong, Father?”

“I don’t know, Mary. I hoped you could confide in me. When your mother came to me and told me you would not be joining us, I…”

“I’m sorry, Father. I just wanted to spend some time with my friends. We went to the swamp, and Richie fell in the water…”

“You went to the swamp instead of the lab.” I could tell father was getting angry. He sat own in one of the wooden chairs while remained standing. “Don’t you enjoy our work?”

“Yes, Father, but it’s your work, yours and Mother’s. I just…”

“Just what?” He asked, raising his voice a bit.

“I wanted to have some fun, silly, stupid, juvenile fun. I wanted to be normal for a change.”

“You are normal, Mary, and special.”

“No,” I said, turning away from him. “I don’t want to be special. I just want to be a kid and do kid things.”

Father stopped for the longest moment and studied me. A submission of sorts escaped his mouth.

“Oh, dear god, what have I done?” Father said. Then he took my hand and continued, “Mary, I’m sorry. I keep forgetting your only twelve. Forgive me.” He had risen out of his chair and turned away from me, while running a hand through his dark hair.

“Yes, Father,” I said as he leaned down to face me eye to eye.

We embraced, finding a new understanding between us. Father and I had always been alike, but his understanding of my situation made me feel as if Roland Faigon was more than just my father. Somehow he became my friend.

I felt like a tiny stone shining in a sea of coal and father was my gold setting, supporting all my endeavors. I just hoped it would always be that way.

To Be Continued…

Here’s a link to the next chapter.

The Sadian Chronicles: Book 1: Broken Candle: Chapter 2: Splattered Blood

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  • Moses Ingram on Aug 29, 2008

    Very interesting, I’m away to read part 2.

  • Kiki Stamatiou on Sep 3, 2008

    I like the way this part of the story draws the reader back to Mary’s times of innocence. She’s caught between pleasing her parents and pleasing herself.

    Take Care,

    Kiki Stamatiou (Joanna Maharis)

  • Verniel Cutar on Oct 24, 2008

    Awesome start for a novel!

  • Juancav on Oct 24, 2008

    Beautiful history,a 12 years old little girl ,wanted still being a child,but parents didn´´t understand her.

  • Keith in France on Dec 19, 2008

    A brilliant story and it makes for very good easy reading … ;)
    interesting how you have managed to capture it from a educated childs point of view …. missing out on there childhood ….. living the life of the Father ……
    (Who obviously wants whats best for her but gets too caught up in teaching her ……. trying to set out her future the way he wants it to be)
    Very good …… cannot wait to read more …… ;)

  • Jen on Feb 10, 2009

    Great chapter

  • Iva Carter on Mar 4, 2009

    You have a way of keeping the reader interested and engaged in the story. Chapter 1 is set up to inform the reader that something major is about to happen in Mary’s life that will change everything for her and possibly her family. As the reader is filled with that knowledge, curiosity sets in as to what the life-changing event will be. As a result, the reader is hooked. Great job!

  • Johanan Rakkav on Apr 10, 2009

    I found you via a comment you made to Leafygreens asking her to take a look at your writings. I’ve read this far to get a feel for this particular story line.

    I have some quarrels with two statements on your first page:

    > It made me laugh to think how I could always drive my mother crazy with my relentless procrastination. Father always said it was a trait all genius children carried, and Roland Faigon happened to be an expert in the field, like every other piece of knowledge he shared.

    > I would have laughed at her untruth, if I didn’t care so much about her feelings. How many times did I hear at the Institution for Higher Learning that all child geniuses were cold, arrogant and insensitive. True knowledge comes not from superiority, but from the understanding not only of how things work, but most importantly, how things feel.

    But neither of these things are true, or anything like it. First, procrastination is something (in terms of “cognitive dynamics”) that P personalities are subject to, but not Js. So for example, the rather zany ENFP personality type struggles with procrastination, but not the equally brilliant but opposite-polarity INFJ (nor even, say, ENFJ).

    Second, most child geniuses I’ve ever heard of (and I was one by all acknowledgements, as was my twin sister) are anything but cold, arrogant and insensitive. Again, personality type as it develops has to be taken into account, as does the poor child’s reactions to whatever influences surround him or her.

    Who is responsible for these distortions of fact? The author, unwittingly (begging your pardon)? The child? Her teachers? If one of the latter, I hope you’ll deal with the issue as you go, if you haven’t already.

    My own writing on Triond mostly concerns a child prodigy, an INFJ boy with great natural gifts and truly astounding supernatural potential. We meet him just as he turns 15 and watch him as he grows into young adulthood — and as he embraces step by step who and what he is and what he’s capable of doing at need. I’d be very interested in your reactions to him and to how I write about him.

    My reaction to your own writing style is that I appreciate it very much. You obviously strive for both clarity and vividness of vision, although I agree with some of the others here that the text needs some refinement in the technical details of grammar and punctuation. Getting the “flow” right in the narrative will solve much of that issue.

  • RS Wing on Jul 11, 2010

    Again, great imagery within your dialogue. Your prose is very fluid…clean and well contructed. I can personally relate to this –

    \\\”As far back as I can remember I was never truly young. Even as a small child I was always clouded by worry. This I found was my first advantage over humanity. It was an asset just waiting to be utilized, but the understanding came with age was born into me from the very beginning.\\\” – Great opening for this chapter 1.

    Fluid dialogue is very hard to right for me, so I see some real continuity within your prose as a whole. I\\\’m getting intrigued and wondering where all of this is heading considering the intro. Great work!

  • gaby7 on Nov 21, 2010

    Liked it!

  • Erin Miller on Jan 11, 2011

    Another amazing chapter to a great story. This book definitely has me hooked.

  • Ima Vee on Jan 28, 2011

    really great… be back on My Novel in Quazen… I’ll be reading the other chapters… This book really got me… :]

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