The morning after a disastrous evening with her boyfriend Reese, Cree Bowman wonders if their relationship is worth continuing. Will a chat with her two best friends help the situation?

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Broken Candle

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Buzz. Buzz. Buzz

Cree rolled over in bed and looked at the clock. It was 6 a.m. Where did the time go? She couldn’t believe it. She had been up half the night doing what else, thinking about Reese.

For the third time this month, they had tried to have just one normal night out, dinner and a movie. Was that too much to ask? It seemed that every time they tried, something happened to ruin it. She hit the snooze button yet again and turned over and went back to sleep.

Five minutes later…

Buzz. Buzz. Buzz…………

“You stupid clock! SHUT! UP! ” Cree’s head screamed from under her pillow, as she turned over and threw the clock across the room. The darn thing was still buzzing!

She crawled out of bed and dragged herself across the room. Why me, Cree thought as she picked up the clock and shut off the alarm. “What did I do to deserve this?” She looked up and noticed that the door was ajar.

“Funny. I thought for sure I had closed that last night.” She yanked the clock out of its plug and attempted to crawl back into bed but there was a knock on the door.

“Cree, are you awake?” came a voice from behind the door.

“Yes, Millie,” she replied.

“Hey, Cree,” Millie said to her friend, all smiles, as she walked into the room straight to the mirror on the wall by Cree’s dresser. In front of the mirror she fussed over her short black hair, which was neatly styled in a banana flip. She then straightened a few wrinkles out of her metallic yellow mini skirt. Cree laughed at the short red sleeveless sweater with the words ‘Catch Me If You Can’ embroidered on it.

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    Your charicters are unique; I\’d never attach a demon to the teen-age mind, but come think of it thier were a few times in highschool i felt i could sprout a pair of spikes and knock someone out. it\’s a little hard to follow though, was there a first part written seporately?

  • Peggy Toolen on Aug 28, 2008

    You’ve got my attention.:)Interesting characters. I have one question though. It kind of distracted me that Jenny’s skin was blue. Why is her skin blue? I couldn’t keep my mind on the rest of the story because I kept wondering why her skin was blue. I guess I’m just weirdly distraced that way. There was a couple of typos where you left out small words for a complete sentence but nothing major. I look forward to reading more.

  • Thomas Young on Sep 1, 2008

    I liked it.

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    I loved the fashion descriptions, the lively chatter of the girls really came alive and the story line is so trendy and upbeat

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    This story promises to be interesting, and I’m back to school.

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    this is so cool. i love your characters.

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    Loved it!

  • Sarah on Mar 18, 2009

    Great story. Can’t wait for the next part

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    Love this story. More please.

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    Hello Allison Jae,

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  • California Dreamer on Jul 9, 2009

    Nice story, I did enjoy reading it, hope to see more like this one :)

  • HannahNicole on Jul 22, 2009

    Great story. It was simple but entertaining. Well written. Cant wait to read more ;)

  • Kaela123 on Aug 6, 2009

    I really enjoyed it.
    You have such good choice of words!
    Well Done!

  • Write Easy on Sep 10, 2009

    very interestin story…i like the way you tried to keep the flow. think you can spend some more lines of describing how cree looks. i have stil not been able to visualise her though i can for her two friends!

    When is the next part?? cant wait! :)

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    interesting story!

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    Nice work!

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    Very entertaining and I love Your use of imagery….

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    Fantastic story.

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    Great story.

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    Great story. Simple and entertaining.

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    well detailed. . .writer indeed! i love your story

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    Bad story.

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    Nice, i will reading all your stories :)

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    Great story! Time for my big date now ;)

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  • Rencontre on Oct 16, 2011

    I think I know someone kind of like Millie. She does things for obvious things and pretends doing them for another reasons, as if she was ashamed to admin her matters…

  • Ben on Nov 2, 2011

    A lot of people wonder whether their relationship will last. Be sure you love the one you are with.

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    some dating advice

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    Great story. The girls seem to real.

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    I loved the character of Jenny. Blue is beautiful.

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    The girls are very relate able to which makes teh story good

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    The girls are very relateable to

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