Well, Lauren… this really is a wonderful piece of true poetry. It’s all said in “simple” words, but they are flowing like they only do in poetry, and you’re saying some deep and truthfull things, in a gentle way, touching, and with images… simple, okay, but it’s the context that makes them special (”the darkness of closed eyelids” works so well because it’s opposed to “the dawn of the day”). I also very much liked “the dirt in the desert”. “The dirt” is not enough, “the desert” isn’t enough, no… it has to be “the dirt in the desert” (oh, and how that sounds!) – and that’s what makes it special. And you have written some really awsome last lines too… Jeez’, if you were cooking and I was Mr. Michelin, I would give this exquisite Nouvelle Cuisine *****!

Very intriguing and moving. Thanks.

Hi Lauren, nice to see you again. A very heartfelt \’extempore effusion\’ as Coleridge would have said.

Patrick beat me to it! I love the first verse,I loved it all, but ‘the closed eyelids’ just conjured up such an image for me. Fantastic piece!

This is a beautiful piece.

Another one of those heartfelt poems you’ve done. I like the smooth flowing of honest emotions.

beautiful! the meaning is so deep!

Awesome! Honest and raw emotions…..incredible!

Breath taking. Lovin it!

Out of the kitchen for a dabble in verse.Well done,great raw emotions swirling here.Touche.

Though Im not sure any of mine are this deep, I could imagine this one sitting on my page next to a few I have posted. Very nice Lauren, You are inspiring me!

Another very creative poem, Lauren. Several other people have already mentioned it, but I can see those “closed eyelids” and I know there is a seperate world for closed eyes (sleep; dreams).

Very moving and beautiful!

An excellent poem. Very deep.

A great poem, hope we see more of these.

Timelessly wonderful.

Well, this is a very heartfelt poem!Take care!

Every words are beautiful and sound. Good piece.

I don’t understand poetry enough to appreciate this deep one enough. But I do get the sense of longing and the imagery is right there! Brian

so mystical,love the depth of your poem

A fantastic piece of work Lauren. Well done.

beautiful poem you have here.

Nice.

Fantastic piece of work. No wonder it received so many reviews/comments in such a short time. Excellent job Lauren!

Excellent piece, I liked it. I will look for more.

I dig it Lauren. I’m not a huge poetry fan, but I really liked this one.

Very, very moving Lauren. Don’t know how I missed this. “found in the hole of history” Wow!

There is so much you in this one. It’s so beautiful and heartfelt. You passion pours so deeply that it can be felt by the reader. I think this is my favorite of your poetic pieces.

-M