Comments on: A Life Without Joy

By: livemike

livemike — Tue, 14 Feb 2012 01:57:52 +0000

Like this one and it flows very well..Poetry is very difficult and comes from a place very few can describe.Feel the emotion while listening to soft music and you will be amazed at what you come up with.We you have written it read it over and over till you are certain that it is perfect.Dont ever be afraid to change something that dosnt fit.Go back to it in a week or so and read it again to make sure you have expressed exactly what it is you need to say..

By: sojournersojourner

sojournersojourner — Mon, 12 Jul 2010 13:48:58 +0000

AshMed on Jan 22, 2009
Nice, I found that it was a good, if slightly creepy read.

Whoa he should read my stuff!
I liked it…

Pick up a pen,
And create for youself a life worth living.

I liked this image very much

By: denus

denus — Fri, 20 Feb 2009 20:20:02 +0000

nice piece.

By: Neil

Neil — Sun, 08 Feb 2009 21:53:25 +0000

Try listening to this:-

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zmciuKsBOi0&feature=PlayList&p=827EB9DCA2416EC2&index=6

whilst reading the words:-

http://www.tynelives.org.uk/stephenson/poem.htm

By: Blade619

Blade619 — Sun, 08 Feb 2009 20:39:17 +0000

Unfortunately poetry is something I’ve allways found difficult, partly becuase we were never taught it and trying to make something fit a beat or rhyme has never come naturally to me.

I think this is a 3am piece, it has that half asleep feel to it… your points have been noted Neil.

By: Neil

Neil — Sun, 08 Feb 2009 20:29:18 +0000

I like parts of this one. There are also parts I am not quite sure about, for example:-

"Where emotions are things of others
Which I cannot know."

I would be a little clearer. Reading this verse, you are obvoiouly capable of certain emotions. I would be tempted to change the above to something like:-

Where positive emotions are things of others, which I cannot know.

By: hfj

hfj — Sun, 25 Jan 2009 21:03:47 +0000

They say that their is someone out there for everyone, you just have to keep looking for your mate. She might just be around the corner from where you live. You’ll know her when you see her. Nice write.

By: 2brnt2b

2brnt2b — Fri, 23 Jan 2009 13:33:43 +0000

Goodmorning Blade,if you could give me your opinion on my first published poem I’d value and appreciate it thanks.It was published today(Sweet and creamy love).

By: Sotiris

Sotiris — Thu, 22 Jan 2009 14:29:57 +0000

Love is like eating for people! We need it! Life would be useless if it hadn’t been for love!

By: AshMed

AshMed — Thu, 22 Jan 2009 10:23:57 +0000

Nice, I found that it was a good, if slightly creepy read.