This is for Angel, a four-year old girl in my village who died because of domestic violence. (Your wounds may have hurt for a while, but now you’re safe in God’s embrace).

Your quiet snore fills

The room as you sleep

Soundly in the crib.

I ask myself,

Did you come from me?

Just before you were born,

Women’s tongues wagged.

Men, over bahalina,*

Spoke of a rooster’s head

Covered with dung.

They talked of a

Small hut, swaying

A young woman, moaning

And a male neighbor

On horseback.

Hush now, don’t cry my son.

Go back to your deep slumber.

These scissors will

Never hurt you.

I only need a strand of your hair

So I will know if my wife went

Inside a hut

Nine months ago.

* A local wine extracted from coconut.

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  • tracy sardelli on May 13, 2008

    another lovely poem, well done.

  • nobert soloria bermosa on May 13, 2008

    how sad..nice piece of work Rhoda

  • salvatore on May 13, 2008

    i agree with both tracy sardelli and nobert, lovely and sad.

  • nancy donayre on May 31, 2008

    whew!!!good job mam…wat a nyc poem!

  • alex on Jun 4, 2008

    Similar stories like this are very common in small villages.

  • Stephen Nico on Jun 18, 2008

    I appreciate the effort!!!

    I enjoy reading the article!!

    But i’m concerned more on the hidden meanings of this article!!
    Very simple, yet mysterious!!!

    hehehe…

  • Tom Woodside on Oct 25, 2008

    nice poem, very meaningful

  • LCM Linda on Jul 17, 2010

    Wish Angel happy in Heaven.

  • Ruby Hawk on Jul 19, 2010

    I don’t understand about the strand of hair or how the baby died. I like the poem.

  • Rhodora Bande on Jul 20, 2010

    Thanks for the comments my dear friends.

    Ruby: The speaker’s son didn’t die. Only “Angel” – the inspiration behind this poem – did. Angel was killed by her own father. He stabbed her with a “bolo” (a sharp, long weapon). Angel’s mother left the family for another man. The father became very violent that particular morning. He held the bolo and was after his three daughters. The two older sisters escaped but not Angel. Anyway, the father is, as of this writing, in prison.

    About the strand of hair, it’s actually an attempt of the speaker to get something from his son’s physical body. Something that will prove or disprove his paternity.

  • Melinda J on Jul 22, 2010

    All I can say is, wow!

  • CC23 on Jul 25, 2010

    that is horrible. =( hope a lot of people will read this.

  • sasuke191 on Aug 2, 2010

    Good share!.. ^^

  • richardpeeej on Aug 11, 2010

    lovely words rhodora but quite sad in a way ….keep them coming my friend,,,,Richard

  • gaby7 on Aug 13, 2010

    Very interesting!

  • sandcastle on Aug 28, 2010

    Great piece!
    I have heard a similar tale like this when I was young and I never understood it as a child. Your piece brought back the sadness and pain I felt then. As a mother, I still don’t get it when a father does this to his own children.

    Very well written.

  • Brewed Coffee on Sep 16, 2010

    Beautifully crafted poem that tells a very vivid story. Excellent one!

  • CVSivaprakashan on Sep 19, 2010

    Beautiful, yet painful to go through.

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