A Sudden Swoop of Sunlight

Kip Spleen on Apr 13, 2009

Tags: light, melting, poem, Poetry, snow, sudden, sun, Sunlight, swoop

Plenty of alliteration, with some internal soft rhymes, playful lineation, and so on. I was trying to describe a patch of light slipping off of a boulder and falling to the ground.

prism of light
            clinging to the
back of a boulder
          buried boldly
coldly crouched in snow
                    loses grip
begins to slip
              flip
          dives
       on
     a
dazzling
         draft
     coasts to crash
crush through ice
    into a downy carpet
           of drifted snow
                gasps
              sinks
    drowned droplets
of light warm
         fingertips brush
      a surface of
thawing grass
            melting fast
                      to die at last

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Sandy on Apr 13, 2009
Very creative piece. I really like what you have done here, especially the emphasis on falling downwards.
Darla Cooke on Apr 13, 2009
Very descriptive. I like it a lot.
DA Cournean on Apr 13, 2009
Very nice. I like your work!
Fresh Writing on Jun 23, 2009
Truly unique and enjoyable…alliteration indeed.

-Fresh Writing
Kakraba Afful on Feb 10, 2010
Awesome alliteration. Nice
Kakraba Afful on Mar 4, 2010
Durant 3-pointer, lovely!

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