Ailing Within

vim3 on May 1, 2009

Defeated by poor health.

Prickly, irritating,

Sore and red,

Eating my insides,

Chewing at my existence,

Endurance on the verge of

Exasperation

A mild distraction- a minute’s

Excitement

Then complete blackness

Beyond comprehension

The pain’s protraction

On and on,

In sight no reduction,

Torn personality

Cloven vitality

Recurring frailty.

No aid at hand

Just a plea for mercy

Lips proud and silent

Heart imploring lenity.

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Comments (9)

ashleycollier on May 1, 2009
Great work, excellent description.
Christine Ramsay on May 1, 2009
A really powerful piece of writing. Well done.

Christine
Darla Cooke on May 1, 2009
Very interesting!
rajeev bhargava on May 1, 2009
a wonderful poem to read. as it’s read the sounds are crisp and enriched with great use of vocabulary. it’s deep and original poetry which i thoroughly enjoyed.
kate smedley on May 1, 2009
Powerful and deeply heartfelt, lovely poetry
Evelyn M Carter on May 1, 2009
Sad and Interesting. enjoyed the read.
Mrs M on May 1, 2009
I love poems with short lines that really kinda of drag your emotions in! Well done.
revivor on May 6, 2009
great write – I love the middle section with strong words
thanks – revivor
Ruby Hawk on May 6, 2009
Clearly expressed. I hope your health improves so you can enjoy life once more. Gluck to you.

Hi there!