This is the way it happens out in the hot country night life. It’s a story that repeats itself often in this less prentious world of country boots, cowboy hats and blue jeans painted on pretty derrieres. You may have heard something like it in a country song.

 You think I’m still in misery
But I’m getting over you
That old cloud done passed over
And the sunshine’s blasting through
I got a carnival of bright lights
Pretty women coming on
And thru that door
Here comes some more
I may never make it home

I could have a heart attack
Celebrating like I do
But I hope I live a century
I deserve it after you
Just coming back to life again
I found therapy right here
She’s at least a nine
Ain’t  no pain this time
Till she bites me on the ear

Do it, do it one more time
A hundred times or two
Bite that lobe and down  that road
She knows the avenue
I’m living life all over
She’s got it all in one
I didn’t know I could
I never hurt so good
What’d you say your name was, Hon…

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  • Sourav on Nov 1, 2009

    Nice… very well written.

  • cutedrishti8 on Nov 1, 2009

    great piece of work

  • Goodselfme on Nov 1, 2009

    Yes, the words do say what seems to be reality . Many messages in this well done piece.Thank you

  • Tanya Wallace on Nov 1, 2009

    You have such a wonderful way with words! This, I can admit is the only one I have read from your work/ poems that does remind me of a country song, the flow is fantastic but I can also feel a rythmn to this.The meaning is fab but I think each and every individual could actually get a different one from this.Very fasinating poem!! As always terrific work!

  • T.Rex McGoogle on Nov 1, 2009

    Mystify, I have to thank you oodles and that’s a LOT for your
    warm words. I appreciate your kindness. By the way have you
    ever written a screen play?

  • CA Johnson on Nov 1, 2009

    I loved the lyrics. I think it would make a great pop song too. You really did such a great job.

  • Phill Senters on Nov 2, 2009

    “Didn’t know I could hurt so good” Gotta love it !!

  • Petalm on Nov 2, 2009

    It really does flow like a song.

  • athena goodlight on Nov 2, 2009

    It’s very very nice. The graphic imagery of your words really does the “country” feel of this piece.

  • Jane Jane on Nov 3, 2009

    really nice.clap.clap.

  • ashan1614 on Nov 3, 2009

    Better than cryin’ in your beer! I like this one a lot. When you put it to music, make sure you let me know. :D

  • cebuanaeyez on Nov 3, 2009

    Your words are very catchy!

  • Teves on Nov 3, 2009

    Nice poem…

  • Ruby Hawk on Nov 4, 2009

    LOL, love it, just love it.

  • Kitty Starwizard on Nov 7, 2009

    That poem could be a song. Great work. Kityy

  • PhoenixRox on Nov 9, 2009

    LOL.. Nice song.. I especially like this part- “But I hope I live a century I deserve it after you”.. I feel that way about someone.ha.

  • Lady Sunshine on Nov 10, 2009

    Loved the last line. It flows very well. Would love to hear it with music.

  • Puja on Nov 17, 2009

    Nicely done!

  • lillyrose on Nov 26, 2009

    You socked it to her, she will not hurt you again!

  • speckledlily on Dec 26, 2009

    Nice piece…

  • Colleen Ranney on Apr 8, 2010

    They say there is no better revenge than to live a long and happy life!

    Another great writing which for sure came at a price.

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