Apocalypse

Debra. on Oct 24, 2009

Tags: dead, lucifer, mankind, revenge, souls

The end is coming…

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First the air turned putrid

And the mist crept in

The portals opened

And down came the sludge

Drip by drip

And drop by drop

Down it fell

Every inch from hell

Lucifer awoke

And to the dead, he spoke

I have come to claim

What’s rightfully mine

And exact my revenge

On the whole of mankind

One by one

And two by two

They will all fall down

Into dust, on the ground

Then the screaming began

From beginning to end

In the darkness of night

The dead arose

They moved in sequence

All in rows

One by one

And two by two

Off they trudged

In silent rows

Devouring souls

Left and right

First the children

Then the women

And next in line

The men, they dined

In the chill of dusk

The earth lay silent

From North to South

And East to West

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maranatha on Oct 24, 2009
You know, inside your head has to be a scary place sometines….

Well written and captivating.
Sexyhood03 on Oct 24, 2009
Scary but great write
Christine Ramsay on Oct 24, 2009
Gosh, Debbie, that’s a scary one. You have really set the atmosphere for this time of year. Well done.

Christine
stryka66 on Oct 24, 2009
A dark & foreboding work – exceptionally well written
Patrick Bernauw on Oct 24, 2009
What a great poem!
xoxo on Oct 24, 2009
Scary and dark… Love it.
deep blue on Oct 24, 2009
Well written tribute to the prince of darkness. But he bears the light and heaven knows if he is true to his name.
Ask Cash on Oct 24, 2009
CHILLING Really goes with the season
Melody SJAL on Oct 24, 2009
Compelling and powerful. Great job, Deb.
Colleen Ranney on Oct 24, 2009
Yes very very powerful. I like it
Alicia Wind on Oct 24, 2009
Scary. But, the power of your imagination and thoughts make people to wander.

Very interesting write.
alc on Oct 24, 2009
Loved this! Thanks for sharing it with us!
Chris Stonecipher on Oct 24, 2009
Scary but very descriptive and well written my friend:)
clay hurtubise on Oct 24, 2009
Spooky! Great job!
Thanks,
clay
clay hurtubise on Oct 24, 2009
Spooky! Great timing and writing!
Thanks,
Clay
rizzei on Oct 24, 2009
wow..happy halloween..! great post
Juancav on Oct 24, 2009
I love it,a very martial poem,order by order,but Who is saved? Lol.
Will Gray on Oct 24, 2009
Wow! Very powerful and so well written!
cutedrishti8 on Oct 24, 2009
A wonderful one..
Jonie on Oct 24, 2009
Scary and so well written!
Tanya Wallace on Oct 24, 2009
Very creative poem with some excellent imagery in your wording.Lucifer means all that is light by the creator, so I can certainly see the irony in this poem! Terrific write Debra, a very enjoyable read!
Karen Gross on Oct 24, 2009
Would be just a well written, creative Haloween story except that this one is true.
lindalulu on Oct 24, 2009
Nice one, dark and scary and interesting!
Barneslow on Oct 24, 2009
Brilliant writing, thoroughly enjoyed, even if it was slightly depressing.
BullwinkleMuse on Oct 25, 2009
Though I realize it’s presumptuous and perhaps arrogant, I somehow feel a bit responsible for this piece. ;^D
Well done, Deb.
writing4angels on Oct 25, 2009
Very well written piece.
Goodselfme on Oct 25, 2009
And I don’t think it is far off either. Well composed with lots of power.TX
Fegger on Oct 26, 2009
Very interesting and effective styling; and you, once again, draw from the dark to convey to the light..nicely done, Deb.
STEVE666 on Oct 26, 2009
Great write, Debra.
Glad I don’t buy into the whole religion thing.
Yovita Siswati on Oct 27, 2009
Scary!
XXElleXX on Oct 27, 2009
This was a dark, thoughtful piece Debra..fantastic imagery too bud
Jo Oliver on Oct 29, 2009
What a great poem for Halloween!
Brian Daniel Stankich on Oct 29, 2009
Halloween poem? I certainly pray that none of Deb’s imagery befalls us, but am certain that some of it will. Deb’s insight goes behind the candy laced day of evil. Maybe it will scare some of us for real. God have mercy.
Ruby Hawk on Oct 29, 2009
Sounds grim, well done.
T.Rex McGoogle on Nov 1, 2009
That was a helluva poem, Debra. You are very full of imagination. I enjoyed your writing. Informative enough that I
may follow the ten commandments slightly closer so I can avoid
such a terrible reality.
Ruby Hawk on Nov 4, 2009
Wow you drew that one up from the depth.
Wylrhyss Terrado on Nov 11, 2009
Maybe a little bit scary, but my Savior is way too powerful than Lucifer…

God bless
DA Cournean on Nov 17, 2009
Almost sounds like Poe. Great job Deb!
Kate Smedley on Nov 20, 2009
Stunning poem Debbie, the title fits it perfectly. One of my favourites of yours.
Mr Ghaz on Nov 23, 2009
Apocalypse..very well-written poem..I loved it..cheers :)
jengriver on Nov 27, 2009
creepy……..nice poem!
The Last Ogre on Dec 7, 2009
Compelling write! Thanks!
withheld on Dec 8, 2009
Dark but good.
Moses Ingram on Dec 8, 2009
Very well written.
S A JOHNSON on Dec 12, 2009
One of my favorite styles of writing, I loved every line!.
mkd1788 on Dec 12, 2009
horrible but interesting…
Jane Jane on Dec 13, 2009
great piece. It’s nice to read your work.
Reilley on Dec 23, 2009
I am glad I found this, it is tremendously well conceived, and very well written. Congrats!
LewSethics on Dec 23, 2009
You must be a scream at “hide and seek”
Inna Tysoe on Dec 25, 2009
Well written.

Inna
V rank on Dec 26, 2009
I hate to think of the message of this poem… there must be something good after that “end”…
thuanynguyen on Dec 29, 2009
Such a great poem!
fashion girl on Jan 2, 2010
What an enchanting poem and such a unique approach…
qasimdharamsy on Jan 5, 2010
well written…nice…
Melody SJAL on Feb 14, 2010
Spellbinding and soooo powerful, Deb.
oldster on Feb 16, 2010
My mum used to tell me that when I was five.
Not too sure I believe it now.
Great poem Debra.
Nhil Ocampo on Oct 13, 2010
Scary scenes but I must say this is a great piece.

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