This is a poem my 14 year old daughter wrote.

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I look into your eyes,

and see the beautiful sea.

A very lovely view.

The blue in your eyes sparkle,

like the rolling of ocean waves.

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  • Theresa Johnson on Aug 26, 2009

    your daughter is definately acquiring her mother’s talent with words

  • Nikita K on Aug 26, 2009

    Beautiful imagery as ever highlighting pure passion – the “rolling of the ocean waves” shows the clear passion you’ve hidden behind this poem. Good job!

  • Aldrin A Wilding West on Aug 26, 2009

    So simple and yet still transporting the reader away. Good work.

  • Nikita K on Aug 26, 2009

    Oh, sorry, I didn’t notice the bit where your 14 year old daughter wrote this…this is a really brilliant job and be sure to tell her because I just love supporting young teen writers like myself and what she’s written is a serious indicator of talent! theresacall is so right!

  • Michael Degenhardt on Aug 26, 2009

    A very talented girl. This is very expressive, clear and flowing. Very well written. Michael

  • mishee on Aug 26, 2009

    right. she’s as talented as her mother, she must be in triond too. (*smiles*)

  • Milton H Peebles III on Aug 26, 2009

    This is VERY good!!!!!!
    Take Care, DreamSweet and Let Your Heart Shine
    ~ milty

  • ken bultman on Aug 26, 2009

    A whole nest of writers coming out of the Carolinas. Quite a nice write at any age.

  • Ramalingam on Aug 26, 2009

    A poetess from a poetess.Very nice

  • ahmad joko setyawan on Aug 26, 2009

    Very poetic words for a 14 year old!Tell her very well done and keep up the writing!

  • CA Johnson on Aug 26, 2009

    I really enjoyed it! Your daughter is on her way to being a really great poet. If I didn’t know the poem was written by someone who is 14, I would have assumed that an adult wrote it. She’s a really good poet.

  • Melody SJAL on Aug 26, 2009

    A few lines of a similar poem of mine on Helium and AC:

    “Oh, how can your eyes be so blue
    That I think I can swim in them.
    In some eyes one gets himself lost
    But in yours I can find the real me.”

    Wonderful piece, Darla, thanks.

  • ajmera on Aug 26, 2009

    Beautiful Imagination…

  • Collette Edwards on Aug 27, 2009

    wow looks like moms talent is passed on, she is wise beyond her years keep her immagination flowing :D

  • kathie107 on Aug 27, 2009

    Very nice! I liked it!:)

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