A storm is gathering on a sultry summer day.

(Image by author)

It was your idea to take a walk

In the still sultriness of that summer afternoon;

Your words that drew me;

Your eyes that compelled me

Although we both read the meaning

In the boiling, swirling sea of the sky,

Shifting shoals and yellow-flecked

Banks of an inexorable indigo tide.

*

I thought I saw a flicker

From the corner of my eye,

And the distant faded hills obscured

As misted waves rolled in.

But the air around was stultifying;

Words and thoughts drowning

Without expression

In weird greenish light.

*

Suddenly, a sharp cold breath

Lifted the heads of tired trees ahead.

In a moment it was all around us

In hair-whipping, eye-stinging gasps,

Stirring the dust into tingling eddies,

Loosening tenuous leaves

And freeing them to soar aimlessly

Above the thirsty city.

*

I wanted to grab the fluttering edges

Of my insubstantial clothing;

Grasp it securely against the voyeuristic wind.

But you …

You tried to seize my hands

And run with abandon towards the approaching torrent,

Your face alight.

*

As the whole world crashed and split apart

I pressed myself into a shallow doorway,

Watched you in wonder

And thought – Is this how it will always be?

Me, cringing into an almost imaginary shelter.

You, head thrown back,

Drinking in the rain.

*

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  • Christine Ramsay on May 12, 2009

    What wonderful imagery you have created with your words. Well done.

    Christine

  • papaleng on May 12, 2009

    lovely with nice imagery.

  • Karen Gross on May 12, 2009

    Enjoyed this poem – you wove the words into a touching story.

  • Joe Dorish on May 12, 2009

    Yes, nice imagery here.

  • Kate Smedley on May 12, 2009

    You should write more poetry Alina, this is beautiful, conveyed it perfectly, lovely choice of words and imagery.

  • Sheila M on May 12, 2009

    Awesome metaphor in this and a lovely picture too!

  • clay hurtubise on May 12, 2009

    Next time , join him!
    Thanks,
    Clay

  • Anne McNew on May 12, 2009

    nice poem

  • Melody SJAL on May 12, 2009

    Stunning imagery and beautiful choice of words.

  • rutherfranc on May 12, 2009

    voyeuristic wind… loved the words you used in this one..

  • Joie Schmidt on May 13, 2009

    I absolutely love that last line “drinking in the rain” beautiful……*

    Blessings.

    Sincerely,

    -Liane Schmidt.

  • George W Whitehead on May 13, 2009

    Lovely poem, Alina.

  • Debra. on May 13, 2009

    Excellent use of words and beautifully written! Such vivid imagery!
    Well done, Alina!

  • Tate Morgan on May 29, 2009

    Alena you write very well of the imagery in your mind and I love that
    tate

  • Katie Marie on Jun 3, 2009

    Very well written. You did a great job of describing the difference between the attitudes of two different people in their approach to life.

  • Joshua Miguel on Jun 5, 2009

    wow… i really felt the storm coming in your post. nice one.

  • Marie Milton on Jul 25, 2009

    Nice piece…thanks for sharing : )

  • BradONeill on Jul 25, 2009

    I was a little lost in the beginning but the ending was superb. A great look at how two different people engage life. One seeking security and the other adventure. These two will make a fine couple I suspect. This is the balance that gets us all through the storms of life.

  • maranatha on Jul 25, 2009

    A great example of two sides of a coin, so to speak. Beautifully, wonderfully written. Don’t be afraid to take his hand and join him! Encourage him to join you once in awhile.

  • cafftee on Jul 25, 2009

    Wow, the coming of the storm so well described, but then so much more to it than that. A lovely piece.

  • ken bultman on Jul 25, 2009

    Great description of two worlds colliding perhaps wanting to become one.

  • goodselfme on Jul 26, 2009

    A true thrilling write with well chosen words.

  • I Have Had Enough on Jul 27, 2009

    Very nice piece.

  • shelly barclay on Jul 27, 2009

    Nicely done.

  • WriteEditSeek on Jul 27, 2009

    I enjoyed your beautiful poem very much. I understand the “cringing” attitude very well. Nicely expressed.

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