Before You Came

Reira on Dec 25, 2009

For my love.

I forgot how it felt like when I was alone.

Before you came, everyday was so dark and cold.

It rained twice as much as I cried.

The clouds disappeared in the darkness.

Stay with me through the night.

Keep me close, til the next days approach.

Will you follow me, Stay with me

all the way home?

Will you hold my hands, Say “i love you”

every night?

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LewSethics on Dec 25, 2009
The poem seems a little loose to me. It seems disjointed, like separate lines in a bunch, instead of connected things.
Also, why do you have words in italics?
I’m no expert, but you did ask me to look and be truthful.
Reilley on Dec 28, 2009
I’m with Lew, wondering why you emphasized certain words.

The emotional content is excellent, yet, like Lew, I am wondering about the unity. If you had to use one word to describe the feeling you want to project, what would it be?
Johanny Lisbeth on Dec 30, 2009
This is so beautiful ~
palak2008 on Jan 2, 2010
Wonderful piece of write..
qasimdharamsy on Jan 3, 2010
nice piece…good write….
Rosettaartist1 on Aug 31, 2011
nice
Joe Ram on Aug 31, 2011
Great one.
Rosettaartist1 on Aug 31, 2011
good article
Socorro Lawas on Sep 6, 2011
Romantic poetry may not have a metric pattern : it is just a spontaneous overflow of feeling or emotion, and that’s what you have achieved.
Mary Patricia Bird on Sep 6, 2011
Very nice.

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