This lyric poem deals with humility in the pursuit of a dream or ambition, here symbolized by stars.

“Beneath the Stars”

Tonight I am alone on top of a verdant hill
Numbering the stars as the world stands still;
Curiously I study the natives of heaven
Through my private line to God from Eden.

God’s kingdom does not seem far away,
It’s close as the thoughts I wish to say;
Then, a song dares me to bring the sky nearer
By plucking the stars to hold God closer.

While the antique hill kisses the jeweled sky
I sing to lure the terrified stars nearby;
My puny arm strains to reach their perfection,
And measure God’s thoughts and His creation.

The diamond stars, stubborn to my reach,
Scoff at me for my crude, childish breach:
“Remember we’re above in honor of the sun,
You’re below in memory of the Great One.”

Then, from heaven a soft voice replies:
“Bard of the stars, hail my works, arise;
You’re My masterpiece with a gold head,
But your tender heart with music I fed;
If you can number the stars in a dark night
And lure them with our song in their fright,
Build your dreams beneath their lofty height
And My Love will guide you with their light.” ###




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  • neopisiva on Aug 25, 2011

    It is very beautiful…

  • Socorro Lawas on Aug 25, 2011

    You make me happy.

  • Rosettaartist1 on Aug 25, 2011

    nice one

  • ittech on Aug 25, 2011

    nice i like it and the similies emebeded in it

  • UncleSammy on Aug 25, 2011

    Nice Share

  • Socorro Lawas on Aug 25, 2011

    Thank you, I’m flattered.

  • master34leeward on Aug 25, 2011

    Nice Share Thanks

  • Ruby Hawk on Aug 25, 2011

    Your poem is perfectly beautiful.

  • beingwell on Aug 25, 2011

    You’re very good.

  • Dennis N OBrien on Aug 26, 2011

    I like this one – very good.

  • Martin Kloess on Aug 26, 2011

    Just ny hunble opinion consider your message a Round might have been more poweful.

  • KittyK on Aug 26, 2011

    Oh, this is just lovely…

  • FX777222999 on Aug 26, 2011

    A poet’s heart revealed through the lines…good poem indeed!

  • Baldo Minaudo on Aug 26, 2011

    Thank you.I think I shall gaze upon the starry sky this night.

  • erwinkennythomas on Aug 26, 2011

    excellent poetry!

  • Socorro Lawas on Aug 26, 2011

    Thank you for your wise and kind comments.

  • jaidadiz on Aug 26, 2011

    beautifully expressed… touched my heart

  • Socorro Lawas on Aug 27, 2011

    You fill my heart with happiness and pride with your comments in spite of my little accomplishment. TY.

  • ittech on Aug 27, 2011

    like it thanks

  • Prakash Vaghela on Aug 28, 2011

    nice sharing

  • Martin Kloess on Aug 28, 2011

    response: no one picked up that ashanti is a guy, the aticle is an irony,

  • vijayanths on Aug 28, 2011

    This is just lovely.

  • Socorro Lawas on Aug 30, 2011

    Thank you for the wisdom shown in your comments.

  • Socorro Lawas on Aug 31, 2011

    Martin: Unless I know what you mean by “Round” I would be adventuring into Alice in Wonderland for my response.

  • Socorro Lawas on Sep 2, 2011

    Martin: Now I’m starting to see what “Round” to you means: it’s confining poetry to set patterns (measured lines).I don’t do that. Romantic poetry is about emotion or feeling which naturally starts and ends anytime, a spontaneous overflow of the stuff. Look at for example Byron’s “Ocean of Eternity ” which I have dissected. Romantic poetry and free verse are unconfined unlike the haiku, tanka, and limerick where you have to get crazy confining to patterns of rhythm, an intellectual exercise or game.

  • Socorro Lawas on Sep 21, 2011

    There is always something or someone greater than us.

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