Another great Bo

No, Denus, you must get up again! Ah, you keep ‘em short but sweet.

interesting…. :]

Only you know how STRONG the blast is….I go along with you.
Its good.

Wow, very short and sweet but says everything… really hope you manage to get up again!

Intriguing poem, interesting metaphor.

Very interesting! You shouldn’t stay down for good though. It’s always best to get up again.

Hope this is just fiction…

Hmmm…well, thats a bit depressing. You should do a follow up on getting up.

you are having a blast dean!

nawww…just turn around and travel WITH the wind…lol….maybe that is where God is blowing you…..great read!

you reading seems to be very emotional.

The hero can’t fall!!

It’s interesting to see all the comments that this is depressing and it should be paired with getting back up again. I’m not trying to undermine anyone else’s opinion whatsoever, I just know I’ve definitely had moments in my life when I felt like this and getting back up was not really on my mind. Thus, I like that this conveys those feelings that everyone experiences at some point or another.

Climb up off your knees Buddy Boy and get back in the race. I hope this is fiction but if it isn\’t you have my advise.

very well-done.

nice

Denus,hang on,I’ll be there in a minute to push you up,together we can do anything!!

Maybe just wait for the blast to pass… After all spring always follows the winter..:)

You\’ll be Ok mate!

hang in there man.

Don’t stay down too long this was some cool stuff.

I agree with Dan, I like your style.

interesting piece.

Stay low if the shot is of a gun .. well done .

Interesting.

You did a pretty good job of giving a heavy feeling with so few words.

Sounds like something out of a world war II dogfight. Nice one.