Blue Cavalry and Razor

elnavann on Mar 19, 2011

Tags: azure, battle, blue, Blue Cavalry, indigo, razor, writing challenge

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Taking up the writing challenge round 36.

out of the blue

on a mission so true

stormed the cavalry

their razor sharp blades

set against the invaders

gleamed gloomily against azure attire

The Blue Cavalry, wounded, did bleed

both soldier and steed

as the parry of blade against blade

turned the battle ground

an indigo shade

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Comments (18)

MaxBuceo on Mar 19, 2011
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youthinksokiddo on Mar 19, 2011
its like a moving painting
d1dezire on Mar 19, 2011
Interesting. Razor sharp blade? wow
Starpisces on Mar 19, 2011
wow, wonderful, I don’t know razor an blade can become a beautiful poem. Well done.
Martin Kloess on Mar 19, 2011
interesting
CHIPMUNK on Mar 20, 2011
Good one different kind of poem
Shannow on Mar 20, 2011
Liked it very much
aprilsong on Mar 20, 2011
nice poem.
anndavey650 on Mar 20, 2011
Indigo is such a wonderful way to describe the colour blue… beautiful verse!
Marie Milton on Mar 21, 2011
A great submission for Duffy’s Challenge !!!
hfj on Mar 21, 2011
Very nice poem submission for the Duff writing challenge. Well done friend.
Freethinking on Mar 21, 2011
Your poem cut like a knife with the descriptive words and phrases you used.
Butterfly Musings on Mar 21, 2011
great poem! I enjoyed it:}
Darla Cooke on Mar 21, 2011
Great poem for the challenge!
Spiritt on Mar 21, 2011
Welcome to the challenges!!!

I love that last line and how it had the word indigo. I agree with one of the people up there, indigo is a nice word.

I love the way this flowed, just a couple lines up top, that I tripped:)over a little, but still a great poem. “
Frederick Dewar on Mar 22, 2011
Very nicely written, short and succinct.
maranatha on Mar 23, 2011
A telling portrait.
Rod Ferrandino on Mar 23, 2011
You capture the dogmatic magnetism of war with “a mission so true”. Nice addition to Duff’s challenge.

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