Broke Up

F J McCarthy on Sep 4, 2009

A poem and song. I hope you like it.

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Cut loose and falling fast

How long will this pain last

I don’t know, if I can survive.

You hurt me, i hurt you too.

It seemed like the thing to do.

You walked out, I went for a drive

Can you recall, where it all went bad

We both seemed to get so mad

Hard to believe that it came to this.

I still think of all the early days.

We thought it would always be that way.

The way you made me feel whenever we kissed.

But those days are gone and your not here.

So easily you seemed to disappear.

Like a dream to me just a memory

So i say goodbye to your misery, goodbye

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Hazel Crowther on Sep 4, 2009
Very moving.
Christine Ramsay on Sep 4, 2009
A very touching and sad piece.

Christine
Katie Marie on Sep 4, 2009
“We thought it would always be that way.”
Happily everafter the fairy tales always say,
but that is not reality.

Good writing, as always.
papaleng on Sep 4, 2009
too touching, can you tell us what the tempo is? friend nice to see you again.
Nikita K on Sep 4, 2009
Some strong emotion in this with feelings expressed beautifully. Wonderful work… I’m impressed.
hollynoel001 on Sep 4, 2009
very moving sometimes it’s just not meant to be
Juancav on Sep 4, 2009
Mixed feelings,great poem.
Lauren Axelrod on Sep 5, 2009
I think we have all been torn in the way of love
cardy on Sep 5, 2009
I do like it lovely poem/song
Johanny Lisbeth on Sep 5, 2009
awwww this is wonderful!!! love it!!
SL on Sep 6, 2009
touching …. I hope it does not reflect what you are living

May God fill your life with blessings & happiness

SL
Yovita Siswati on Sep 7, 2009
Very touching. I wonder how is the melody..
Aldrin A Wilding West on Sep 7, 2009
Like this one. Desperately trying to put a tune to it. Do you have any plans?
RS Wing on Oct 26, 2009
Sentimental prose. Fluid and strong literary voice!
xinnianhao on Nov 8, 2009
Simply great. If I had this kind of poetic skills, I would be writing a book of poems.

Hi there!