A poem about hurting…

Can you see the anguish hiding behind my eyes?
Can you hear the silent screams that echo through my soul?
Can you feel the sorrow as it drips down my face?
Can you smell the rot of failure and regret?
Can you afford to give me a minute of your time?
To console me through a kind and reassuring word,
A supportive touch of your hand, or a sympathetic and
Caring smile…
Can you afford not to?

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  • Joe Poniatowski on Jan 20, 2008

    Nick, I sure hope this isn’t a reflection on how you’re feeling right now! Very moving.

  • Alexa Gates on Jan 20, 2008

    I hope you’re not feeling this way right now nick!

  • Judy Sheldon-Walker on Jan 20, 2008

    Nick, you have all of us concerned. Are you all right? Your poem is hauntingly beautiful.

  • IcyCucky on Jan 20, 2008

    I feel a hidden frustration in you poem, and I’m aching with “Can You” question…

  • Anne Lyken-Garner on Jan 20, 2008

    Nick, very moving, but I know that we don’t necessarily have to feel it at that very moment to write about it.

  • R.B. Parsley on Jan 20, 2008

    I must agree with Judy and Icy. This is not only hauntingly beautiful,, but it raises the question, Are you okay buddy? Hang in there, a new and brighter dawn is on the way. Its right at the end of the tunnel. Climb back on your horse and ride like the wind toward the light. You’ve got friends!

  • Dee Huff on Jan 20, 2008

    The answer to your question is: We can’t afford not to take the time to reassure and comfort others when they need it. Your poem is a gentle reminder.

  • Nick Kenney on Jan 20, 2008

    Thanks so much everyone…you’re all wonderful friends and yes,this is how I was feeling when I wrote it. But I just got a new and better driving job with Fed-Ex and I’ll start in a month!
    Yes, Dee, you’re exactly right! We must take the time to help each other get through the hard times!
    God’s blessings to you all!

    Nick K.

  • Naomi Joyce Lewis on Jan 20, 2008

    I feel the urgency of the poem and the feelings of a one in need of understanding. I always extend my hand to those who I know are in need of comfort. It is the right thing to do.

  • E. McCray on Jan 20, 2008

    A true expression of an emotion that visists us all at various times. I sensed it to be like weather, simply passing over. It seems that you had your weather wear on and did not get soaked. Thank you for sharing.

  • Lucy Lockett on Jan 20, 2008

    Yes, Nick. I can give you all the time you need! A new job, scary and exciting all at the same time. I like this passionnate poem.A clearing of thoughts to make sense of the changes, nice work!

  • Francie on Jan 20, 2008

    Good to express your feelings out loud and always on paper! There is a great feeling after writing heartfelt feelings. I feel better after writing my most difficult things down. You can say and write all you need to, no-one judges. Here you have many friends that hear you and respond kindly, that’s so good. I wish you well on your path of changes. You sure did a good job expressing yourself, I know the comments must help some also. *Take good care

  • Liane Schmidt on Jan 20, 2008

    Beautiful and sorrow-filled. The ache in ever line is felt poignantly.

    Best wishes.

    Sincerely,

    -Liane Schmidt.

  • Shannon on Jan 21, 2008

    Your poem is full wisdom to bad more people do not take heed of it. Your a hauntingly great writer with wisdom far beyond the ages. Maybe people will stop and listen to your words. If just one person does then you have made a great accomplishment.
    Best wishes

  • johnnie metcalfe on Jan 21, 2008

    your poem sound like you are hurting

  • Ruby Hawk on Jan 21, 2008

    A wonderfully written expression of pain and heartache, I’m so glad you are feeling better and congratulations on your new job. I hope it will be everything you are looking for. You have all my best wishes.

  • Nick Kenney on Jan 22, 2008

    Yes Johnnie, I was hurting…but I’ve found a new job thanks to John H. and will start in a month. It pays much better and is a new twist on trucking for me…it’s driving a straight truck instead of a semi with Fed Ex. The only downside is that I’ll be gone 3 weeks out of every month. I’ll be running all 48 states and Canada with a partner. It’s also hauling what I’m trained to haul…Electronics/Exhibits.
    Thanks so much Ruby…

  • M.C. Johnson on Jan 22, 2008

    Heart tugging. Great Job!

    I hope this is all just poetic inspiration and not real life, big bro. God Bless!

  • Nick Kenney on Jan 23, 2008

    It was how I was feeling, M.C. but I was also trying to make a point…a spiritual guideline so to speak.

  • Nick Kenney on Mar 25, 2008

    Thank you Mary.

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