Candles and firelight…

 

He closed the door,

and on the floor,

were rose petals, white and red,

the pillow still impressed

with the shape of her head,

rich draperies covered the bed,

the room was lit only by candles and firelight,

the moon was the only outdoor light,

the covers of the bed turned back,

intimacy lingered in the air like a swarm,

with her sheets still warm,

the scent of a woman lingering in the room,

he sensed the desire,

as the wood was popping in the fire,

her clear blue eyes stared

into the lined angry face,

she was still holding on to her grace,

then reality came back to him with a crash,

everything lit up in a flash,

driven to voice his deepest fear,

as the home invasion was much too clear,

he had murdered the husband

at the bottom of the stairs,

and murdered the young wife,

without a single care,

as the perfume of her hair

and the warm female smell of her body

made this crime too much to bare.

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Comments (11)
  • UncleSammy on Jan 5, 2011

    Nice share good one, see you around

  • Anj M on Jan 5, 2011

    Nice

  • lillyrose on Jan 5, 2011

    wow… brilliant. Your description of this erie tale was perfect. I loved the twist at the end. Candles always set a very vivid image.

  • LoveDoctor on Jan 5, 2011

    Vivid imagery and gruesome description. third line rose petals not peddles. lol.

  • Atanacio on Jan 5, 2011

    we all can’t be as perfect as you Doc LOL good catch I didn’t realize it

  • LoveDoctor on Jan 5, 2011

    Too much cranberry vodka perhaps? LOL.. I am not perfect. I make mistakes too.

  • Guy Hogan on Jan 5, 2011

    There have been several home invasions in this area; but in the last two the invaders were killed by the people who lived in the homes. That made me feel good.

  • PSingh1990 on Jan 6, 2011

    Nice Share.

    :-)

  • Authoress Terry E. Lyle on Jan 6, 2011

    “Bravo” top-notch work…..The illusive Authoress can’t hang around because there’s a virus on Triond that’s trying to shut my computer down….to all my fans I wish I could stay, but I’ll sneak back on another day. Peace & Blessings.

  • Anuradha Ramkumar on Jan 7, 2011

    Wow…excellent imagination.

  • yes me on Jan 12, 2011

    Your still the man Frank cheers

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