Keep writing such poems.I enjoy them.Its kind of a puzzle.

Great poems!

First, eat the ice cream, then write a longer poem.

Hi,

The first thing is never give in, or give up. If you have a framework to your article just keep adding words, eventually words become sentences, and sentences become paragraphs.

If you think that your content may fall short of the minimum word ruling write your thoughts down on paper before commiting to the computer and play around with your ideas. Can you add a few more lines, or perhaps a whole new verse?

If you can not get it right after several attempts, save it, walk away, grab a drink, or a snack, and come back to it refreshed!

Hope this helps!

Short but interesting poem

Nice poem, it was very puzzling at first. It’s a great way to attract the attention of a reader. Keep going Jane Jane!

I liked this you’re style is your own should do this more good read.

I thought it was something else. I too, scream for ice cream! Cool poem

Nice poem.

hehehe… that was great! I like choc ice cream the best too x

Cool poem

Good expression of emotion!

I like the materail. We get confind to our thoughts when restrictions are applied. Express and let those who read decide. Friend, fan, smile

nice one, Why not joinme in an ice cream treat, it may help you write longer poems. Just kidding.

Very nice not all poems have to be long and i think you should try to write as much as you can in as many styles as you can as its helps with confidence and also views

Very nice not all poems have to be long and i think you should try to write as much as you can in as many styles as you can as its helps with confidence and also views

if you need a longer poem you could always repeat the first verse to end last, good poem, considering it is your first time way you have tried it, dont give up.

Not too short. It’s a great poem!

I’ve seen shorter poems than this one published – it’s a mystery what the Triond editors are thinking from day to day. I had one of my poems rejected for too many spelling errors. I had typed it in Word, and spell-checked it before submitting it. To boot, when I went to “edit” my poem on Triond, their own spell check did not find any errors.

As for free verse – most times it works better for me, as I don’t generally think in rhyme.

Great little poem!A enjoyable read,very creative as usual!

When I read, ” The touch of coldness makes my desire grow stronger every minute.”, I thought that this is going in a different direction. Inspiring and witty! Thank you for sharing.

Nice poem, not all poems have to be long to get your point across!

Good poem. Let’s have an ice cream party!

I liked this poem. don’t get discourage by revisions… just keep trying. Sometimes you have to add and take away for them to accept it.

Very lovely poem

Good poem.

It may not be your style, but it was very well done.

Free style poetry lets out more stress : ).
I think you’re very good at free verse, you should try it more often : ))

Very creative and great narration!! spoken very true.

Funny
not your kind though?

what’s up with that smiley omg

I loved it, keep writing more of these!

yeah it is too short, but the start of a beautiful poem. I love your line about the touch of coldness. I am very short on time tonight and am in a cyber cafe; I left my computer at a friends, but I will endeavour to read some more of your stuff.

sebastian

Sweet!

I loved it!! No disappointment there. Youre a great poet.

do not fret for you have done well. sometimes our style dosen’t matter as you have shown. Just write what you feel and you can never go wrong . Well done.

I loved it! I thought you were talking about something else at first, but I still enjoyed it. I liked what you wrote in this poem. I am not really good at poetry so I am not really sure where you should go from there, but I did enjoy it.

loved the poem, keep up the good work sometimes a good poem is a short one

I’m not sold on your use of the word “craving” in the second line. I liked the rest of it, but that second line isn’t quite right in my mind.

Nice job, reminds me of one I did called elementry.

nice work. reminds me of what i do sometimes when i chill

Great work…

Great poem!

That is beautiful. Thank you.

Some lovely langauge and ideas and you’ve done an exceptional job! Great stuff!

That is beautifully done.

Christine

wahaha.. I really thought of Edward Cullen…

You threw me for a loop at first, my jaw dropped for a second. I really like where you went with it, very clever. If it’s considered too short, who cares, I think you did the right thing by writing fluff at the end.

Nice little poem, and very sweet at the end. haha. well done.