This poem is about the unwitting combination of four deadly forces in a teenagers life. Things go crazy when all four combine at the same time.

In case, you’re wondering which four deadly forces, you can see them in the title itself.

The weight on my tongue
The frothy whirlpool
The little brown speck
The elated grin

Her scent in my lungs
Her tempered rules
Her slender creased neck
Her smooth, dark skin

The breeze in my head
The delicious haze
The unbalanced heel
The 1000 pound hit

The metal and the lead
The head-banging craze
The mythic squeals
The unforgiving pit

The weight on my tongue
Her scent in my lungs
The breeze in my head
The metal and the lead

The frothy whirlpool
Her tempered rules
The delicious haze
The head banging craze

The little brown speck
Her slender creased neck
The unbalanced heel
The mythic squeal

The elated grin
Her smooth dark skin
The 1000 pound hit
The unforgiving pit

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  • cole justify on Jan 21, 2009

    very cool piece of writing.. I loved it…

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