Criminal Acts

ashan1614 on Jul 5, 2011

Tags: aborted, birth, creation, creativity, crime, criminal, invader, Perpetrator, Stolen, thief, Thoughts, villain, voice

Have you ever had someone read your diary? It makes you feel violated in a way. That’s the same way I feel when someone reads the thoughts and drafts of poems I have jotted down in my notebook.

A thief with a crowbar prying open my head

Taking my thoughts without consent

As if you had the right to them

To use at your whim

My creativity stunted, my creation

Ripped from the womb of my mind, aborted

Never given the chance to come to fruition

It’s no surprise that my spirit is barren

Unable to bring forth life

For fear of its children being stolen away

While yet being developed within me

Or its thoughts staked out by a maleficent invader

Yet somehow I am viewed as the villain

For giving voice to those thoughts

You wished to silence and giving birth

To the offspring of my life experience

Who is really the perpetrator here

To be found guilty of criminal acts

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BluSphere on Jul 5, 2011
Wow, this was quite amazing, Ashan. Great job!

Best regards,
BluSphere
LoveDoctor on Jul 5, 2011
Excellent work. I would feel violated too.
mphsglo on Jul 5, 2011
Very good work.
isloooboy on Jul 5, 2011
I agree with lovetolaugh your words are so strong
Adrn0919 on Jul 5, 2011
A true betrayal of trust. The work we as writer create can be very personal and only shared when WE are ready to share. Beautifully written. Thank you.
CA Johnson on Jul 5, 2011
This is really good. I never like feeling violated. This is definitely a way to feel violated. You described how I would feel if this happened to me.
Gail Cavanaugh on Jul 5, 2011
It must have been very unsettling. Good imagery, as usual.
Jimmy Shilaho on Jul 5, 2011
I guess it feels like secretly going through your mail or phone messages.
ashan1614 on Jul 6, 2011
It is, as Adrian pointed out, a complete violation of trust. I’ve taken to keeping my notebook in my sight at all times; never leaving it sitting around or or left accessible to anyone. Sad, but true.
T. S. Lewis on Jul 7, 2011
Great stuff. Crazy how your rawest thoughts and feelings can be used against you when they are just part of you.
Ruby Hawk on Jul 7, 2011
true, I never let anyone see a poem until it’s finished.
fishfry aka Elizabeth Figueroa on Jul 11, 2011
I totally agree your poem is straight to the point.
Awesome
PartizAnka on Jul 12, 2011
Amazing poem! It was real pleasure to read.
StudentWriter on Aug 6, 2011
Nice poem

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