Dark

Ranveer Singh Battu on Jan 13, 2009

Tags: dark, demented, evil, love

A dark love.

She haunts my dreams,
Has raped my heart.

Sold my life,
And stole my laugh.

She shred my feelings,
Tore me apart.

Left me where the,
Dark road starts.

Punished for the sins,
I had never done.

Am in the wrathful eye,
Of the demented one.

Took my sanity,
My evil hun.

Can’t find humanity,
Because there is none.

No pain can beat,
My despair.

No red hot blade,
On my chest bare.

Can overcome the pain of,
Her stone cold stare.

Left me cursed,
And disappeared in thin air.

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goodselfme on Jan 13, 2009
A daunty tale with much deep emotion. Very well penned with a dot of yearning mixed in this poem. Words fit well and the flow superb.
Holly J. Harrington on Jan 13, 2009
Incredibly descriptive for a dark love. Well put and crafty with simple verse. Like it. Interesting description of the dark side of love.
Joni Keith on Jan 13, 2009
Wow, so descriptive. “has raped my heart” …beautiful phrasing.
QuinMonty86 on Jan 13, 2009
I agree. Very descriptive and emotional. Nice!
S M Blomker on Jan 13, 2009
i like good poetry and this is good…keep it up, i enjoy reading what you have to say.
Sandra Tapia on Jan 13, 2009
Great Therapy Session!
Karina on Jan 13, 2009
Awwwww, Intense, i love it! and these are the types of poems that really touch deep, you did a great job, because I think its all about describing how you feel on thee inside and this attracts the reader because it sounds so realistic and interesting… Nice, keep it up
Reilley on Jan 13, 2009
Very dark, and evocative. I liked it.
Sotiris on Jan 13, 2009
Dark poem! Well written
Majic on Jan 13, 2009
Aw!!! You hit me where it hurts, Ranveer! Now I don’t have to write about my own pain!
Nice and really dark!
joystick7 on Jan 13, 2009
Very Nice!
Catelin Hoover on Jan 13, 2009
Marvelous! Simply marvelous, my friend! Good rhytm, flow of words.
papaleng on Jan 14, 2009
a heartfelt and powerful poem. Nice choice of words.
Angie0000023 on Jan 14, 2009
Good poem! I liked it!
luv2write on Jan 14, 2009
Nice poem Ranveer, so thoughtful
Inna Tysoe on Jan 14, 2009
A good write.

Inna
papaleng on Jan 14, 2009
this a good example on how a good descriptive poem should be, Thanks for sharing.
Joie Schmidt on Jan 14, 2009
Strong, powerful work* – - it leaves a lasting impression.

Blessings.

Sincerely,

-Liane Schmidt.
eddiego65 on Jan 17, 2009
Very intense. Excellent piece.
Alicia Wind on Jan 17, 2009
Aww– nice, flowing and vivid!
Vikram Chhabra on Feb 6, 2009
Excellently written. Great flow of words and very deep about the pain of separation. Keep it up young man!!
LOVELYHONEY on Feb 12, 2009
in love i live all alone if i continue to moan who will me own for the love of my life let me study i am young though very sturdy the whole life is awaiting out there some day i will find some one some where.

good son ur great

lh
Clay Hurtubise on Feb 28, 2009
Very nice. Good flow and message.
Thanks,
Clay
teddybear09 on Mar 21, 2009
Wow, I’m not really sure what to say. I guess all I can say is, amzeing.
Rana Sinha on Mar 21, 2009
Ooh! So much suffering. Well written.
Tate Morgan on Apr 9, 2009
I loved this.Believe me you will see this thru and be happy again t is a rare but pure thought i love it
sam9953 on Apr 14, 2009
you are very good poem writer
cleblanc on Apr 21, 2009
really good. great write.

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