Extremely well written Lady Sunshine !!!
Thanks

Good write. I liked the structure of the linnes. Good and gripping.

Clouds hover above my head, fluttering
Cool droplets kiss, caressing my thin skin
Drenching me in memories, showering
but my Lady sunshine shines within.

you always bring sunshine to us all, my Lady

Very moving and evocative, Julie. Loved the language and the imagery in this one.

Here’s the link to Notes & Grace Notes that I think you should join because you are such a good writer:

http://notesandgracenotes.com/index.php?option=com_frontpage&Itemid=1

Hi Sunshine…I like your poems!

Hi Lady Sunshine, absolutely beautiful, you make me want to cry! Once again, I agree with Papa Sparks.

A poem full of regret. I did something recently to a loved one that I regret. I don’t know how it will all turn out. See what your poetry can do?

excellant

A very heartfelt and expressive poem. Well done.

Christine

really full of emotions and it feels sad.

very well written

You have done well with this, L.S.. The last few lines are a great addition because they clinch your ending with a succinct thought. Good job.

Just a couple tips:
Your first stanza is a little confusing for setting up a mood, because you combine words like kiss and fluttering with clouds and rain. These choices create too much contrast in the feeling of the words. Maybe find words that have a similar meaning, but a sadder feeling to them? I also think you could use the word overpowering to rhyme with showering, as in “Clouds hover above, overpowering,…”

I also see a lot of capital letters. If you use capital letters and commas, don’t forget to close your sentences.

Other than that, great job. I really enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing, and take care.

Always my type of post. The lines speak about pain and misery and for all that, love lost in poetry. Must be all worth it.

This is absolutely amazingly written with touching words with poignance and depth of sentiments…