A woman finally makes her debut in heaven, but one is left wondering, why?

Debut in Heaven

Her once red lips were far too blue,

around her we found not a clue

as to how we came to say adieu,

the town around us became askew,

this, we were unable to construe

in heaven she finally made her debut.

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  • Ryanxxx on Mar 10, 2012

    I think “not found” not “found not” !! :)

  • alexiafeatherchild on Mar 10, 2012

    It would sound awkward that way I think. Perhaps did not find a clue… but found not I feel is still fine. When its poetry I find that poets play around with the words sometimes.

  • Aroosa Hermosa on Mar 10, 2012

    Short but awesome :)

  • lauralu on Mar 10, 2012

    Interesting poem1

  • Safa on Mar 10, 2012

    very good!

  • dodolbete on Mar 10, 2012

    Very interesting poem… and usually I’d rather go with just do it attitude, without wondering why. But for the last one I also need to tell you one thing, as written on one of the t-shirt I used to love very much, “Don’t follow me, I’m lost.” Hahaha ^_^

  • Melody SJAL on Mar 10, 2012

    That’s nicely written.

  • UncleSammy on Mar 11, 2012

    Good One

  • jotomy on Mar 12, 2012

    few words but nice.

  • Joe Average American on Mar 13, 2012

    Short or not,it still carries a message.Find the song ,Epitath,Black& Blue,, by Kris Kristofferson,it is a very old song about a woman’s’ funeral, borders on the bizarre,but beautifully written.

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