Decisions

Nikita K on Sep 27, 2009

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A grueling decision is faced by a young couple. A short story (flash fiction) with only 20 sentences.

A pearly tear rolls down her velvety cheek. He catches it in his palm and flicks it away. He sits her down on the hard wooden chair. His furrowed eyebrows are locked with pain and anger. She sniffles and her sob echoes in his empty ears. Inside her mind, there is a shadowing cloud of delirium. Inside his mind, bolts of fury clash with zaps of hurt.

They break.

He thrashes the room and shatters the table. His eyes pierce the shards of the bulb from the lamp he broke. She throws her head back as fat tears smudge her face. Her long painful sobs prick his ears and make him hurt inside. Both of them are paralysed with emotion. But they have a paralysing decision to make.

Do they save her – the pregnant lady, who is his only love? Or do they save her unborn child – without which both of them will be devastated? Only one can survive while the other passes away.

Yet more pearly tears roll down her velvety cheeks. And his furrowed eyebrows are even tighter with pain and anger.

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deep blue on Sep 27, 2009
Some good things in life have to be given up for the greater good. An emotional, detailed written account of a temporal relationship reaching an ending.
martie on Sep 27, 2009
great writing. Sad tale.
JohnDaOne on Sep 27, 2009
Good writing, as you said, VERY short!
but still, good.
PR Mace on Sep 27, 2009
Deeply emotional piece. I think this is my first view of flash fiction. I will have to look it up and see what it’s all about.
chitragopi on Sep 27, 2009
Hard to decide, indeed.
Lostash on Sep 27, 2009
If it was me…..the baby would have to go! Dilemma though for those that really have to deal with it!
Sourav on Sep 27, 2009
Very good write! Nicely done!
Shawn O on Sep 27, 2009
That is a very, very hard and sad decision to make. Great piece.
Ruby Hawk on Sep 27, 2009
Atikin, your story is entertaining, no question though, it would have to be the baby to go. No baby should come into the world without a mother.
CA Johnson on Sep 28, 2009
I really loved your story Atikin. I have never read a flash fiction story before. I would not even know what to do in that situation. The woman would be heartbroken if she lost her baby and the baby would not have a mother. That really is a tough decision.
Mythili Kannan on Sep 29, 2009
So sad
Grace Kathryn on Sep 30, 2009
Mother is saved with much therapy.
cutedrishti8 on Oct 1, 2009
Great piece of work..
Littlekid137 on Oct 4, 2009
Wow
LoveDoctorLoveGoodBye on Oct 5, 2009
This is awesome work.. A pearly tear rolls down her velvety cheek.. This is a great line. This is a tough one. thought provoking and very emotional. The mother should be saved instead of the baby in this case. Regardless of who dies it’s still going to be painful, but if the baby is saved then he will have no mother. The couple is going to suffer anyways. they will just have to go to therapy and work it out.
Anne McNew on Oct 14, 2009
this is tough though situation like this really needs tough decision.
great write.
Teves on Oct 16, 2009
Excellent written…
CutestPrincess on Oct 24, 2009
Very nicely done, again. Keep up the excellent writing!

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