Empty soul.

Iliterate insomnia doesn’t grasp fallability.
Forces you to see differently
as twisted communion.
Red eyes
rimmed cowardice.
Only your not yourself
and you think someone else’s thoughts.
Shreds of sanity
cannot part the fog.
You walk alone where hands can’t reach.
Your feet becoming numb
on progressive provocation.
Open and swallow me.
I see you from the inside.
Intolerable treachery
ugly like cancer and nothing lives.
No wonder you’re unrecognizable
in fragments that insisted you do it.
Bled frustration in the false reflection.
You know inside it’s dead
and that kills you.
Your flesh becomes blind.
A million tiny tragedies eat you alive.
When in time
you’ve become nothing inside.

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  • ken bultman on Jul 11, 2009

    A profound delving into the soul of the matter. The shreds of sanity will come together in time.

  • Lostash on Jul 11, 2009

    Very dark…..love it!

  • Used to be Shelly on Jul 11, 2009

    I wonder when you’ll write one that I don’t like.

  • Pablina on Jul 11, 2009

    nice piece. like the style.
    pabs :)

  • Ramalingam on Jul 11, 2009

    Nicely written in a very high style.Thanks for sharing

  • angelga2001 on Jul 11, 2009

    I really like it…nice detail!

  • Johanny Lisbeth on Jul 11, 2009

    Wow! how did you think of this! this is beautiful!!! I love dark writing

  • Tanya Wallace on Jul 11, 2009

    Very powerful writing sheila!Excellent work!

  • gringoperry on Jul 11, 2009

    Exceptionally good, you drew me right in!

  • fivegoldstars on Jul 11, 2009

    Wow.

  • L M ONEAL on Jul 12, 2009

    I like your explaination of a troubled soul. It does relay the inner confusion of many a troubled individual.

  • Brenda Nelson on Jul 12, 2009

    sounds like a typical day at work lol

  • Mark Gordon Brown on Jul 12, 2009

    Well Captured.

  • cromanyak on Jul 12, 2009

    Very good poem! This was my favorite line.
    “A million tiny tragedies eat you alive.
    When in time
    you’ve become nothing inside.”

  • sweetievee on Jul 12, 2009

    I’m not quite sure what you’re talking about that did this to you….. I can sort of relate in feeling numb.

    “Open and swallow me.
    I see you from the inside.
    Intolerable treachery”

    I actually like that line the best. I’ve wanted people to go away, leave me alone, or just get it over with and swallow me.

    The imagery in this is superb.

  • BradONeill on Jul 12, 2009

    Emptiness is a terrible feeling, very well conveyed here.

  • BullwinkleMuse on Jul 12, 2009

    I especially like the final four lines. Also, “Shreds of sanity cannot part the fog.”

  • Ruby Hawk on Jul 12, 2009

    Hatred or guilt can rot out the inside of the strongest person.

  • irishpen on Jul 13, 2009

    I love this one very much. So raw

  • Marie Milton on Jul 13, 2009

    Love it…I wonder what inspired it…

  • CutestPrincess on Jul 31, 2009

    A poem with a very strong message. Thanks for sharing.

  • Duff D Moss on Sep 8, 2009

    A rough aggressive feel. Almost frightening. Well done.

  • David Crerand on Sep 8, 2009

    Very strong imagery well expressed. Good Job.

  • raptor22 on Sep 8, 2009

    Interesting poem.

  • Used to be Shelly on Sep 8, 2009

    :)

  • oldster on Sep 9, 2009

    Very good poem Shiela– Sounds like a description of writers block, but you’ve overcome that here.

  • STEVE666 on Sep 10, 2009

    Great poem, Sheila. Can’t work out how I missed this originally.

  • Rod Ferrandino on Sep 11, 2009

    “bled frustration in the false reflection” was my favorite segment; the entire work “bled” raw emotion.

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