“Lead to grandeurous disillusion”

Life’s story in four words.
this was beautiful Mnof, for someone claiming ill to poetry.

wow, you disturb me. That was most certainly not beautiful.

(but I will give you very well written)

You should try your hand at poetry more often. Some really excellent passages, my favourite being ‘A journey fraught with lost hope/Answers figments in our mind’s sky/We see ourselves (what a brilliant lie!)’

Brilliant MN! Thats the first time I have ever seen the word figment used in context too!

That’s quite good.

Inna

Well Done Mnof…
Marie

This is really your first poem? If so, I am in awe.

Introspection can be an ugly business sometimes. Yet with all we see, both good and bad, we come to a place where we can be, if not at peace with ourselves, then at least an uneasy truce.

Here’s another comment for your file Mnof. You put the effort into making the anthology…you deserve all the ‘likes’ and comments one can get….: ))) You’re the best!!!!!

Finding answers in misguided trust

Don’t look now, we’re one of us!

Great lines there. Not ever really knowing is the basis of faith. What a terrible thing to hang all of our hopes on, Yet in the end it is the only thing we have. I like the perspective and I am sure when your fragments do finally come together it will be a glorious day.

Pull your fragments together Mnof – if nothing else, you are at least an excellent wordsmith!

Thought provoking. I’m not sure I want to be one of me.

Indeed thought-provoking! How sad that you are so disillusioned. But you are right, we all come to this place, then learn to build. So build on, sir, on the foundation of truth and reality this time! May all your me’s adhere to the me you build.

God bless.

Well penned piece, you have certainly “tried ” this before.

The title of this poem shoud be what it is like to be a writer. lol Great job.

Wow, powerful. I’m happy to have some company in the abyss.

Strong. Yet I find it hard to identify with. Perhaps thankfully.

My head is a little shell shocked from the battering of the well present but some what uneasy poem!

This is very powerful. The diction is what really made this poem powerful

the mes, Is, and wes liked this. I had to take the apostrophies out to get this to post so it will probably not make sense.

Very good poem. Very powerful too. Somewhat made feel uneasy at times but that is what poems can invoke in us as we read them.
Lee Ness

You held me captive as I walked with you through your journey of life. very nice.

* see comment above *

and write something new!

Wow Mn,

you would make an excellent poet.not only the lines are well thought,but they also make excellent rhymes,you should try your hand your poetry more often.The theme of the poem is close to my heart.

Read this for the third or fourth time, now. This piece is so well penned, and leaves one yearning to reach out to you.

so. you wrote a poem about me in highschool. I would say you were quite accurate…

I think we do have to fall apart in order to correctly find where the peices \’should\’ have gone in the first place.

Stick with sports. haha. Just kidding dude, that was a good read and excellent attempt at something (poetry) that you don’t care that much for. Good use of words and flow to the poem. Well done

Beautiful, powerful. Well done, If this was your first try I cannot wait to see you try again. Poetry lives within you, like it or not.

Hmmm….definitely a thinker. Like the line “Demons and I will mediate”.

Thanks

You may have just tried your hand at poetry when you first wrote this, but I will say you need to continue trying poetry. I thought this poem was excellent and want to read more poetry from you.

Very deep and thought provoking. Well written too.