Draggin Me Down

Inanethoughts on Aug 28, 2009

Tags: conflused, pissed, wahteger

Who cares.

I can’t do this anymore
I swear it is dragging my down
Down with me
Down with you
Down to all that it’s come too
I wish i I was falling
Falling from you
Falling from me
Falling from everything thats come true
I wish i was wishing
Wishing something new
Wishing for you to come through
I keep everything inside
for me
Inside for you I don’t know what Else to do
If there was more time to think
Time to know
Time to think
Instead of relying on basic instinct

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loualbert on Aug 28, 2009
This piece has a bit of too much prose in it. When writing poetry, think and breathe poetry; try to make it different than prose, and I really mean this. Take your time and don`t write the first word or phrase that comes to mind.

If possible, divide the poem into stanzas and the stanzas into lines. Try to use unique words; intead of nice or good use more descriptive adjectives and so on.

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