Wow. So deep!

this is sooowheeeet*^_^*

lovely poetry. like it much!

Well said.

Nice Share.

nice entry… lovely poetry

Nice rhymes, lovely piece of poetry.

Awesome….

WOW! you have put together a well-rhymed poem, and the thought, it was so cute. Ganda ..

with a cup of coffee and also feeling tired due to lack of sleep and after a day’s work, I reminded myself to read Brewed Coffee’s article to de-stress myself, and I really did, after reading this touching poem, I suddenly have the urge to write poem, but think only, don’t know what to write yet.

btw, as time passed by joining Triond, I’m beginning to talk in a poetic manner…

Bravo… great poem. I love it.

A poignant and beautifully written piece.

Christine

I’m blown away! galing2x… I was really looking forward when you’re going to publish a poem! More please, more great poems!

Wonderful Piece

Thank you all for your kind comments. Very encouraging. But I have to admit, I’m not really a gifted poet like some of you are. I just thought I’d give it a try. Once in a while, I just might pop in a poem or two.

Papaleng yung huli, naubusan na ko ng words na pwede i-rhyme.

Starpisces – true. nakakahawa ang mga poets. Finally rubbed a bit on me hehehe

Mysocalledlife – I’m afraid that’s just about it for now. Nosebleed eh hahaha!

Thanks again guys and gals for your wonderful comments

I liked it! thanks for sharing!

Extremely well written. You are gifted, my friend. Thank you.

Wonderfully beautiful! Really good work!

Well, I do hope you keep popping in a poem or two . That was a wonderful poem.

I recited it aloud. Love the way it sounds. I love happy endings too. This could be one beautiful prayer. Thanks for inspiring your readers.

Intense and deep piece, friend. Nicely written.

I knew you could write a poem
Your faith is so deep rooted as reflected in your poem.
I love your poem so much and I look forward to reading more poems from you.

Sad one but I like the way you ended it. Excellent!!!! Two thumbs up…

Your comments are highly appreciated. Thanks for taking the time to read and even out loud.

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Awesome! I must say this reflects how we may want to give up, but we don’t…. cause we have hope…. hope is survival too many… we can get it from just one person that makes a difference… at least this is what I’ve gotten from it… poetry gives us individual meaning I guess, that’s the beauty… great write… thanks for sharing….

Lovely sentiments.

Shaggy, you said it right. Poety does give different meanings, depending on the reader. Going through the comments above, the poem is sad, happy, poignant, wonderful, cute, intense, deep, sweet, etc. You saw hope and survival. I had a different thing in mind also. Some focus on forms and rhymes, some on the emotions.

That’s the beauty of poetry. It invokes unique interpretations. Enjoyed all your comments. Thank you once again.

Aw! that very nice. A lovely one.

this is so nice. touching! thanks!

Brewed, sis, huli na ba ako sa party? Ganda nito ah, your readers are raving about it. Poetry is also not my turf but you inspired me to try one, not now of course but when I get back. This reminded me of my late father, especially the last few hours before he breathed his last. Ay naku, bakit mo ba ako lagi pinapaiyak??

Sorry to make you cry Likha. You are blessed you were there with your father as he breathed his last. That was my wish with my own father, to be there to hold his hand during his last moments. But he was far away…OFW eh. Sad but that is life.

I’ll wait for that poem you promised. I know you’re good at it

Friends, you inspire me. Thank you for being so encouraging.

Very nice, poem. Thank you for this share.

Good choice of words. The cadence is utter bliss to the ears. Looking forward to reading more of your work. Namaste, Adel.

sweet.. very well done..good job.

Oh, that’s so nice,

This is so sad, but beautiful!

Bravo Zulu! That’s nice.

lovely…

Wonderful post. Well done.

I love this! I can really feel the emotions of the poet.

This is extraordinarily well composed with a great selection of words, nice flow, deep messages and a fine tempo too. You picked a wonderful title too. Bravo!

I love the last part,
My heart beats with one more breath to heave
At life’s end, one thing left to believe
Just when everyone has gone to leave
There you were, the only one I need

what a really great poem – I really like it

Extraordinary beautiful and deep poem, great work! So inspiring

thy words steal my heart
as i leave this world
i’d hate to depart
alas none shall know
from where we came
and whereto we go …

but the pain in the heart remains
and the strike of death leaves no remains
except of brutal cruel laughter
we all are bubbles of energy
once again there -after
beautiful thy thoughts
on departure.

Has a high penetration power-it just touched me deeply!

Just lovely. Beautifully written.

wow…

i came back.. beautiful still..

Ang ganda naman! reminds me of my poems when I was in college kaso di ko pwedeng ipublish kasi most of them were written in our vernacular.

such a beautiful poem
all have read,
i’m sure your face by now
must be all red

but the whole world is waiting
for your thanks ,
each one of us,
including me ,
but you have yet to find time
are you now composing
more such lovely poems for me
i suppose so,
so that we all can share
and love to read you more
as we all for you do care.

Wow! 52 comments! This piece actually deserves it.

Sis, I didn’t even know ganon na kadami ang comments LOL! Thanks for mentioning that. I’m smiling

Beautiful poem.

Sometimes all we need is Someone in our corner.

good one

Hmm.. meron ka na rin palang poem na nagawa I thought if i could was the first. Isa pa pala yun sa mga tulang nagustuhan ko. The last lines reminded me of a song pero di ko maalala ang title.

A poem constructed beautifully by the author and very touching.

Aaawh… Lovely but sad poem. It was written a long time ago so I’m sure you are feeling more positive now.

May life treat you kind, Brewed.

Hindi ako maka log in sa Triond Brewed, pero ako ito, si Phoenix. Napakalungkot naman pala nitong tula mo. Straight from the heart but I like the ending, galing! O di ba nga, mawala na lahat wag lang ang ating itinatangi.