Dying Fate

Poetic Enigma on Nov 16, 2008

Tags: dying, failure, fate, Poetry, screaming, speaking out, trying, Unheard

A poem about trying your hardest but still failing.

I screamed out, but no one heard
I spoke out, but it is as if I never said a word
I gave everything I have, and it still is not what you want or need
I tried my hardest, but I still bleed

I’m surrounded by many yet still feel so alone
I sit around with my family, but it does not feel like home
I always try to do something to feel that I belong
but it is always a different story behind another song

Day after day, I live this monotonous routine
Wondering if I will ever be able to change anything
I’m becoming more depressed and I am running out of hope
and I wish I could find a better way to cope

but this is how things are for me now
I would reach out for help, but i’m still unsure how
I just hope when I learn to, it will not be too late
and I can wake tomorrow and not feel that dying is my fate

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sassy on Nov 16, 2008
This is pretty darn good. I liked it.
And I can relate to it.
Love the wording too
Keep up the good work.
Sarah on Nov 16, 2008
this is very good. i love your work
jackalina on Nov 16, 2008
I love your work too, like the way the words work so well together. Another good piece!
Tmrobotix on Nov 16, 2008
Very good, hopefully not what you really feel but I think you do.
Good luck with it, and keep writing it’s beautiful!
papaleng on Nov 16, 2008
another great poem.
Will Gray on Nov 16, 2008
Great write, but you should never feel this way!
Bernadette Louise on Nov 16, 2008
Yet another great one!
Lavia on Nov 17, 2008
I loved it so much. I loved the flow. I loved the sadness, the defeat of it. It was raw; It was real. Thank you for sharing. I could relate to the feelings and emotions it stired up. However, I don’t think I could have expressed it as well as you have. Once again, thanks for sharing.
Debra. on Nov 17, 2008
You just never give up. I love this poem because it’s so sad and very detailed. wish you all the best and remember, keep trying and God bless, my friend! This is a great place to express your emotions rather than keeping them all bottled up inside of you!
Melody SJAL on Nov 20, 2008
very well-expressed. The flow and the message are both excellent too.

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