Emptiness Ripped Through

Atanacio on Mar 15, 2010

Tags: crime, darkness, death, sadness

A sad turn of events.

She snapped,

just like that,

mind trapped,

eyes flat,

her life utterly useless,

she wanted no more,

her child dead on the floor,

there was no reason for it,

her thoughts would spit

profanities,

so she turned away,

she just couldn’t stay,

it was such a dark day,

and those awful tricks her mind would play,

her life fizzled into nothingness,

emptiness ripped through,

and there was nothing else she could do.

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diamondpoet on Mar 15, 2010
Antonio this wasn’t as strong as you previous work, it was okay. I used to getting several chills just by reading you work.
yes me on Mar 15, 2010
An other great page Frank…. is that the London map
maybe Jack at work? the red dots his trail thus far?
and a sad mother Identifies her daughters remains?
Jimmy Shilaho on Mar 15, 2010
Very good. Sometimes I wish for resurrection.
Shamanz on Mar 15, 2010
Looks like it’s a poet on poet competition…I’m out lol.
standingproud on Mar 15, 2010
Frank this didn’t frighten me//um what’s up??? LOL…
Lady Sunshine on Mar 15, 2010
lol. People are critical this Monday. I enjoyed it Frank.
clay hurtubise on Mar 15, 2010
I liked the flow of this piece.
Good job,
Thanks,
Clay
deep blue on Mar 15, 2010
That was a tragic feeling of losing a loved one. Well portrayed lines.
LoveDoctor on Mar 15, 2010
This is excellent. I love the rhythm. I don’t blame her. poor thing. It must be devastating. good work:)
Kakraba Afful on Mar 16, 2010
If greatness could be etched it would be seen in this poem
qasimdharamsy on Mar 16, 2010
Nice one….
RS Wing on Mar 16, 2010
I felt so empty after reading this one. You have a gift my friend. You wield your pen so masterful, full of powerful, raw emotion. Great read and fine write.
lillyrose on Mar 16, 2010
very powerful, visual words
Evelyn M Carter on Mar 16, 2010
Sad thoughts. Nice job. Thanks for another wonderful share!
Ruby Hawk on Mar 16, 2010
I thought it was very well done.
Kakraba Afful on Mar 17, 2010
poetastic!
Stacey Watts on Mar 17, 2010
You know this one is rather intriguing. I reread it twice and realized the full impact of this. It is deep. Very complex. I like how you paint a picture with just a few words leaving you to really think about what is being said.
LoveDoctor on Mar 25, 2010
The imagery is awesome and it lets the reader visualize every little detail. keep up the good work:)

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