I actually wrote this poem directly on Triond last night.. But then, I saved it as a draft, thinking I might have to edit some stuff but I didn’t have to.. It is scary as it is!.. I don’t know what was working on my mind while I sat in front of the computer last night because I have mentioned most of things that freak me out!.. I couldn’t sleep after that.. Was even afraid to remove my glasses because then I wouldn’t see clearly what was around me!.. Boy am I glad that night is over!!… ^^

Raindrops enter the house with the blowing wind,

There’s thunder, there’s lightning,

The dark, dark clouds and the dark, dark night,

And the rainstorm is even more frightening.


With anger, the sky is rumbling,

Growling like an angry dog,

Ghastly shadows are seen, moving,

Clear, even through the thick, thick fog!


The empty rocking chair,

The black cat screaming.. Crying?

The snake raising its head from beneath the grass,

It was hidden all along.. Spying? 


Windows and doors flying open and shut,

Slimy things crawling all over the floor,

An empty couch is suddenly occupied,

On an empty bed, who is there to snore??


Soft, soft whispering,

Little knots on thread,

Thrown into the sea,

Hidden under someones bed.


Drops of blood,

Spilling from where??

The clothes are stained.

On that knife, is it hair?


Torturing sounds and huge blockades,

Is that light seen far away?

This night has been so long,

When will come the bright, sunny day??


But now darkness takes it place,

The light is gone,

Aahh! That noise!

A cloth is harshly torn.


Crows came for the blood,

The house had to be left.

For what was it that was seen?

Something left by a guest?


Weird markings,

Partially and deliberately burnt clothes,

Jealousies,

Greed for the sound of shattering hopes?


Bones, skin, nails,

Wrong sayings,

Visibly minute,

Strength known only after weighing.


Puppets and needles,

Drawings and scary faces.

Evil intentions,

Sighs and grimaces.


In this huge mist, grey and old,

Where the cries, the wailing stops never,

Sure not easy, but it has to be known,

The day is lost forever.

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  • sasuke191 on Oct 4, 2010

    But no one else found it scary!…

  • papaleng on Oct 4, 2010

    very intense and good imagery!

  • webseowriters on Oct 4, 2010

    A nice share

  • Raj the Tora on Oct 4, 2010

    wow, nice poetry

  • strovek on Oct 4, 2010

    nice share.

  • Fatima on Oct 4, 2010

    Its nice!…. amd thought provokin’ and deep…. :) well done!

  • Yuan Lee on Oct 4, 2010

    You\’re an awesome poet, Bushra!!

  • Yuan Lee on Oct 4, 2010

    You\\\’re an awesome poet, Bushra!!

  • Starpisces on Oct 4, 2010

    Amazing, a 14 yrs old girl can write this poem so well, wondering what was I doing when I was 14, oops, don’t compare…
    this is a way to praise, you see….well done.

  • youngpoet on Oct 4, 2010

    Great imagination! :-)

  • Mifra Khan on Oct 4, 2010

    luvvved ittt!!!!!!

  • carissimi on Oct 4, 2010

    ;0

  • giftarist on Oct 4, 2010

    Great imagery. Liked it!

  • LoveDoctor on Oct 4, 2010

    I love the imagery. Great job. Your mind was working fine last night. lol

  • Eunice Tan on Oct 4, 2010

    Very well said.

  • Kaye TM on Oct 5, 2010

    great poem. nice

  • Inxxu on Oct 5, 2010

    oh wow! really WOW…makes me feel so real!

  • reciel tanaid on Oct 6, 2010

    very great imagination.

  • sasuke191 on Oct 6, 2010

    hehe!.. Thankss!!!.. ^^

  • Goodselfme on Oct 6, 2010

    You have created a great image here, but not scary to me.

  • T.M. Battles on Oct 6, 2010

    You no doubt have a natural talent for writing so keep doing it!! I loved this poem and can gracefully say you are a way better writer than me and I am 25!!!! LOL Good luck with your writing and happy publishing!!

  • T. S. GARP on Oct 9, 2010

    Scary imagery! Well, done. Like it!

  • Likha on Oct 11, 2010

    This is a great way to scare adults! haha! I know girls your age are easily scared but I didn’t realize they can write a scary poem with such vivid imagery. Hats off!

  • R.Laws on Oct 14, 2010

    well-penned poem

  • Heather Dawn on Oct 18, 2010

    Ok, that was pretty scary. Will be giving me the creeps when I go to sleep now…gee…thanks…

  • clay hurtubise on Oct 20, 2010

    Good job, and just in time for Halloween!
    Thanks,
    Clay

  • dino renaldo on Oct 22, 2010

    good writing

  • sasuke191 on Oct 23, 2010

    Hehe!.. Thank you all!!… ^^

  • ADZRIL on Nov 12, 2010

    it was nice !

  • culprit pontiff on Nov 13, 2010

    so would you still think you haven’t scared us?
    you amazed us,,anyway..

  • Netty net on Aug 7, 2011

    Do you read scary books,

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