Duff Challenge 3.

‘Twas a night of festivities in a medieval palace of glee
Lots of food and activities, it’s where our hero would be
A masquerade ball was on lots of dancers one woud see
So everyone was unknown behind a mask was also he…
Bored of this event was our prince ‘though it was thrown in his honor
where all princesses and queens would vie for his ardor
Many a time his father have asked choose a queen for our future
wherefore our Prince would bask such was his snobbish nature…
But that demeanor was with a reason
for his heart was already imprisoned
by a peasant who once saved his hide
from a pack of hungry wolves on the countryside
She was but fifteen then, three years ago
And since then their secret meetings made love grow
And now he awaits her arrival with a proof in tow
A golden feather from his cap to the guards she’ll have to show…
Hours past and everyone was impatient
for they don’t understand the prince’s being lenient
It was then his heart broke and he thought
“She’s not coming!” and tears poured forth
But the mask hid them from everyone around
and suddenly he unleashed his horse and on rocky ground
rode away into the night to get an explanation
from the love of his life, his only inspiration…
On his way he passed the same forest
where three years ago started his unrest
on the place where she fought off the wolves
but now stabs of pain in his chest constantly throbs
But a foreboding terror gripped his heart
As howls of the same pack gave his fear a start
for a silhouette of a gown was strewn in shreds
he now has a suspicion along with a growing dread..
And so he jumped down from his horse’s back
And shaking off all cowardice he crawled into the dark
where he knows a cave would be waiting
It’s where they first have passionate meetings
And there his worst nightmare he confirmed
as a single spot of moonlight from the opening beamed
and exposed the gruesome scene in that balmy cove
his golden feather held lovingly in a bloody velvet glove…

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  • Annie Hintsala on Jun 7, 2009

    That had a classic ‘Grimm’ quality to it. Good write, always impressed with your stuff.

  • C Jordan on Jun 7, 2009

    A challenge well taken.

  • Sandra A Flowers on Jun 7, 2009

    remarkable a complete story in rhyme, I love your creative style and flow,, though this tale is sad and tragic, it is still beautiful in composition, awesome job, excellent!

  • Daisy Peasblossom on Jun 7, 2009

    Noooooo! Not fair! Fairy tales are supposed to have happy endings! Good story, *sniffle*

  • seashell66 on Jun 7, 2009

    But the bloody glove was from the dead knight she slayed for keeping her from her true love, the Prince. Please bring her back! Great write.

  • arabian nights on Jun 7, 2009

    Aww lovely once again my friend, you never fail to amaze me with your writing.

  • Katie Marie on Jun 7, 2009

    Wonderful write! This challenge has inspired some awesome stuff.

  • Deep Blue on Jun 7, 2009

    Filled with suspense and thrill. I wonder what actually was the ending.

  • Paul Roberts on Jun 7, 2009

    I was wondering where you were, tucked away creating a masterpiece. Friend fan, smile

  • SJ Dickens on Jun 7, 2009

    Simply wonderful!
    I cant use any other words.
    Shalom.

  • Bullwinkle Muse on Jun 7, 2009

    Good to see you back writing again, ruth.

  • Duff D Moss on Jun 7, 2009

    That was great – unexpected ending. Thanks for playing ruther dude. I hope you play the next round too.

  • Unofre Pili on Jun 8, 2009

    So wonderfully creative tale.

  • DA Cournean on Jun 8, 2009

    I want to cry! I love this very much. Do more, Do more….

  • rizzei on Jun 8, 2009

    wow awesome! it was as if i’m watching a romantic movie:)

  • hfj on Jun 8, 2009

    “Showoff”. You’re first challenge and you have to write classical novel with a sad ending to impress the lady’s as usual. Some things never change Don Juan Rutherfranc! Great write friend.

  • Darla Cooke on Jun 8, 2009

    Excellent writing!

  • Fegger on Jun 8, 2009

    Cool….Rut’s out of the poetic closet again….great write for the task, brother!

  • Kate Smedley on Jun 8, 2009

    You have such an original style and great flair. Please do more …

  • Andrew Davies on Jun 8, 2009

    I enjoyed that a lot. Excellent prose my friend.

  • richard reed on Jun 8, 2009

    awesome write..great job man!..stay blessed…Rich

  • lh on Jun 9, 2009

    Awesome,
    Original,
    Cool,
    Excellent,
    Wow,
    Wonderful,
    Masterpiece,
    Remarkable
    Please friends add on….

    He is my poetic master and trainer,

    And one time good fan
    He leaves me far behind,

    I have no words to find,

    And hope while reading my poems in future,

    He will remain as kind,

    As ever before as my poems,
    He reads no more.

  • Alyssa M. on Jun 11, 2009

    Sorry for the late comment!
    I appreciate your openness.

  • Morgana on Jun 22, 2009

    I don’t know how you feel when you’re writing your poems, but when I’m reading them I feel that my heart is at my throat.

  • Majic on Jun 30, 2009

    That’s “Bloody\ romantic mate!

  • MMV Abad on Jun 30, 2009

    I enjoyed reading it. Very well written. Thanks :)

  • Taffy on Jul 1, 2009

    Love it! But sadness…

  • c. s. robins on Jul 1, 2009

    Very nice, as always

  • Joshua Miguel on Jul 2, 2009

    i really enjoy reading this. tnx for the share

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