From Seven to Deadly

alc on Sep 3, 2009

Tags: Anger, emotions, envy, gluttony, Greed, Life, lust, perfection, Poetry, pride, seven deadly sins, sloth, Thoughts, wrath

A poem on the seven deadly sins!

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ENVY,

The perfect body,

5 feet 4 inches,

Large bust,

Eyes of pleasure!

LUST,

Wearing nothing,

Taking off your clothes,

Pleasing and teasing every inch,

For me to take total control!

GREED,

No I won’t commit to you,

You won’t have me,

Only belonging to myself,

Finding me with another man!

WRATH,

Anger is overtaking you,

The urge to kill me is in reach,

Looking until you stumble in to ally,

Forcing me into the trunk of you car.

PRIDE,

Feeling as if an achievement was reached,

Flaunting me around the town,

Hidden not to be seen anymore,

Your untouchable and a god to be pampered.

SLOTH,

A slave to you,

Sitting their on your bed of feathers,

Your fed, bathed, and pleased by me,

Only to be trapped with everything to do.

GLUTTONY,

Perfect I am no more,

Making me eat lard, and oil,

Disgrace to myself and who he is,

Yet no way out of this hell!

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cutedrishti8 on Sep 3, 2009
Nice one to be shared…Nice selection…
XXElleXX on Sep 3, 2009
Interesting a/c – interesting that you have used an unhealthy relationship and/or a relationship that is souring to illustrate ‘The Seven Deadly Sins’. Plain-spoken and quite relevant. Perhaps you might consider writing a poem about the ‘The Seven Holy Virtues’ – chastity, abstinence, temperance, diligence, patience, kindness and humility. Well done a/c.
emmahaynes on Sep 3, 2009
Very nice
BradONeill on Sep 3, 2009
I liked it all but gluttony. It is a very good poem with intense emotion and sexuality but ending with the Gluttony kind of killed the mood for me. My gluttony would have been his all consuming sexual appetite not concerned at all for your happiness only his own. Taking more than he deserves and leaving you with nothing.
Born to be Free on Sep 3, 2009
A very thilling, exciting, simulating and thought provoking poem!!! really,really good
David Crerand on Sep 3, 2009
Good work. See pm
hfj on Sep 3, 2009
Nice poem. Remember, where there is a will, there is a way—–out! No relationship will last if there isn’t a little give and take from both sides. Well done friend.
STEVE666 on Sep 3, 2009
Original idea. Well written.
Darla Cooke on Sep 3, 2009
Very interesting poem.
willie wondka on Sep 3, 2009
interesting.
Birgit Niveaux on Sep 3, 2009
very well written. i enjoyed it very much.
Tanya Wallace on Sep 3, 2009
I thought this was excellent! Very creative and original as always and cleverly crafted!
Collette Edwards on Sep 3, 2009
well done, you have put it together in your own style and word LOVE IT!!
Milton H Peebles III on Sep 3, 2009
That was interesting
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giftarist on Sep 4, 2009
Nice one!
Jane Jane on Sep 4, 2009
nce piece. these sins are really deadly. interesting way of expressing..=)
Emma Green on Sep 4, 2009
Very much enjoyed this one alc good work!!!
Marie Milton on Sep 4, 2009
I’m shamful!!! to be so far down the list of commenters…
oh well…better late than never : )

I think you’ve done really well with this one. I don’t think anyone else has done one like this before. Great Originality : ))
redpony7868 on Sep 4, 2009
nice i liked that
simplyoj on Sep 13, 2009
great article, I think envy is the worst.
RayFree on Oct 22, 2009
WOW I really like this because I love poems about relationships especially when its formated like this, Great Piece!

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