A five-lined, metaphorical Tanka poem based on a painting by Nicholas Roerich, paired with a commentary senryu.

layered clouds 
filter sweet-hued luminosity 
sacred hint reveals 
material density 
disguises subtle light 

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carpe diem is
one essential attitude
we tend to forget

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  • girishpuri on Aug 10, 2012

    awesome share

  • Uma Shankari on Aug 10, 2012

    Like them both. You couldn’t have chosen better words to describe the delightfully colorful clouds masking the light source beneath. Carpe diem — i had to refer to dictionary. Yes, we never make best use of NOW.

  • Martin Kloess on Aug 10, 2012

    Well written, thank you. And thank you for your support.

  • stephenls on Aug 27, 2012

    I love the sense of Spirit in the painting and your words.

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