Haiku One

PaulB on Apr 22, 2011

Tags: Cool, first attempt, Haiku, Pools

This is my first haiku. This is not quite my favourite poetic form but hey… Saw one discussed on the Triond Forum so thought I’d give it a go. Cannot tell you what it means of course. Am typing this to meet the minimum word requirement. God Bless You All.

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I drool over cool

Blue pools a fool or mule would

Never rule alone.

Paul Butters

See my next one: http://authspot.com/poetry/haiku-two-3/

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Darlene20 on Apr 22, 2011
I don’t write Haiku but I thought this was ok for a first attempt. Well done and thanks for sharing.
CHIPMUNK on Apr 22, 2011
great read
Martin Kloess on Apr 23, 2011
wait a minute, wasn’t that you making fun of haikus? wait another minute. didn’t i write a haiku about this? wait one more minute for the halibut
Lilliana F on Apr 23, 2011
I am useless at haikus, our English teacher just ignored their very existence! Very good attempt!
Adam Henry Sears on Apr 27, 2011
Hmm…. interesting senryu. I think that your use of 6 rhyming words kind of limits what you really wanted to say, but hey, chacun son gout! I don’t mean this personally, but did you try too hard? Anyway, a moderate first attempt nonetheless! Congrats and take care.
PaulB on Apr 27, 2011
Thanks Adam. Please check out number 2 if you get time. TBH I ran into a wall when I reached **pools**, but don’t tell anyone. lol
Nicole Kiehl Bieber on May 12, 2011
5-7-5, buddy!
PaulB on May 12, 2011
I read that fewer syllables are allowable when they are relatively long, hence the four in the final line. But whether 4 are effective here I will have to ponder on.
PaulB on May 14, 2011
Fixed the haiku today. Added a syllable to the final verse. Improved It I trust.
lightfang on May 16, 2011
Really informative, keep writing and enjoy.

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