I don’t know much about Haiku either, but i like the poem. It has a clear message.

What is Haiku I have no clue,maybe you can tell me at a later date.But I did like the message and the heart picture.

Lovely piece, Kate. Haiku are generally supposed to be about natural imagery.

But people make all kinds of short poems like yours- the 5-7-5 syllables is a terrific writing exercise that helps you come up with lovely descriptions & phrases, such as “Tantalising caresses/Trembling surrender”

There are soooo many types of poetry. All beautiful of course.

Works for me Kate, I loved it.

Great haiku! I like it a lot.

I have no idea about Haiku, but I liked the poem.

this is high quality haiku
it’s rare to get such meaning into a 5-7-5 piece
nice work!!

You know I’m a fan of haiku, Kate. I think you did extremely well on your first attempt. I was told, however, that including an image with the written words makes it a haiga.

This is perfect in form and so very descriptive and flowing, all ingredients of a well written poem. Michael

It had been many years since I had written a haiku, so when researched writing them for Triond, I was daunted by the complexity of writing this verse form. The result was Haiku Impossible. Your verse has the most common syllable structure down perfectly. I’m not totally sure about the content; but I will say it is a natural topic.

I’m terrible at haiku. But I like this

Wow, that was nice! Have seldom tried haiku myself.

Hi, Kate, how are you?
While I like the image you presented (in your haiku-attempt) the only requirement you filled was the 5-7-5 syllable rule. But, there are a couple other rules for it too. But first, just let me say that if anyone ever tries to tell you that 5-7-5 is not necessary, then they are just trying to fool themselves. The reason some versifiers believe that 5-7-5 is not necessary is because they don’t realize that when the original Japanese versions of haiku came out, they were translated to English by minimalists, not realizing that the Japanese onji is very similar in nature to the English syllable. Haiku requires 17 onji in Japanese, therefore in English, 17 syllables. The truth of that was lost in translation when translators tried to be too exact in their English interpretations. Anyway, to continue: in Japanese, the haiku masters who perfected the form required that it include a contrast of opposites, as well as a season-word of some sort to represent one of the seasons or the changes between them. Then, of course, the hardest part of the whole process is to capture a moment in time when, in some kind of personification, either nature reflects human nature or vice versa. Therein of course, lies the difficulty. That is why very few English writers have become accomplished enough in it to say that they are good at it. I have only written a couple of haiku myself, so I may be no expert in writing it yet, but at least I can say I’ve done my homework. I have read somewhere in my research that according to Basscho, one of the Japanese haiku masters, said something like: “Write one perfect haiku and you are an intermediate, write ten perfect haiku and you are a master.” All of this, of course, is not meant to frighten you out of trying: quite the contrary! I wanted to make sure you had all your information before you go and try your second. Trying your first means you have at least started on Step One: one only becomes good at doing something by doing it.
As for minimalists that disagree with the 5-7-5 syllable count, or any of the other requirements, there is always the senryu! Thanks for sharing, Kate, and keep trying.

I thought it should be about nature, but never mind I like it.

Must say that it is a creative work, Kate.
Grr this is my 10th attempt to post this comment

I thought it was very good.

Although don’t have much idea about Haiku, apart from what I have been seeing on triond:), I really like the words you chose. And lovely picture.

really seductive..

I don’t know much about haiku’s either,
but I think you did a great job,
beautifully written

I think you made a really good effort Kate. i liked it.

Christine

hey kate, i’m no expert at haiku but I loved yours

Just 3 lines, but it tells a beautiful story…
I especially enjoyed the first line
“Rose petal kisses”

so romantic & sweet! keep up the good work!

I loved it Kate as I love all your poems. I may not know much about Haiku but I do know what I like and I like this very much. Keep it up Kate!

I like it,too

Haha…I like this too..

Do not know Haiku but I like it!

i actually liked it! well done, kate!

That’s pretty lovely.

Nice one. Thanks so much for sharing.

Well done!

I’ve said it before, so excuse me if I’m boring anyone. I don’t give a flying fig what ’style’ a poem is in. If it works for the reader it works.

Kate….you work for me….always have done, and I suspect always will….this one works for me too….xx

Definitely a good verse. You asked for feedback on this. Adam up there is correct in what he says. Also, a haiku should be about a season. Nevertheless, you’ve got the correct form. You can build on that. This is a sweet emotion.

Buzz, the author *did* ask for constructive comments. She wants to take her writing seriously and concentrate on getting things right. Sometimes, and to some people, those things matter.

Wow, I like the exhaustive reply from Adam!

I loved it and it made me quiver like jelly!

Actually, I think there are several types of Haiku or Hiki(!)…and Adam mentioned a few. I loved it!

Good luck, Kate . j

Wow,this was hot Kate. The best part about poetry is that it can have any form you want it to. I loved it!

I\’m not too concerned with the rules, I liked it. It was sensual and sweet.

I think love, not just by looking at the picture but from the words you chose to use. Its beautiful.

short yet profound. Could hardly dig it.

Awesome! soo sweet. That was lovely poem. I really enjoyed reading your work. Well done. Thanx for sharing

Great work Kate, i love reading your work so give us MORE

Although Adam’s explanation above is technically correct, I liked your use of the haiku format for this very expressive work.

I really like your art. I don’t know much about haiku, seems as if you have a great start here. Can’t wait for more. This had to come from deep within. Very good. I like it! E

After reading and researching I find that this piece is considered contemporary Haiku. You did single out your format and made your subject matter definitive. So moving. E

I don’t care much about the rules of making haiku, but I think this is really nice. =)

I really dig this. You rock!!! i have been stumbling across great poets all day and right now i am totally stuck on your page.

A brilliant first attempt.

my deepest respect and gratitude,Kate
LOVE IS ALL

Walk in beauty change the world.

That is incredible! I love it . . .

Love this one. How I miss doing Haiku

Very sweet.

Cheers,
Kaavs