What a beautiful poem, so vivid I felt like I was standing there with you. I love the ending where you refer to ‘the cut and thrust below’, it’s nice to escape from it.

Hi Kate,

I’ve sent this for a fix so that the stanzas show.

My great uncle’s Eugene’s middle name was Hawthorn. I was taken with it and wove it into a poem because he loved to wander the woods, as do I.

Hi! I love places like this. I love ferns and foliage that oftentimes when I’m into deep thinking, I would always think if it might be a good material for perfume or cologne and your picture has reminded me so much.

Athlyn,
This was a very beautiful poem and setting.

Such a lovely* poem.

Blessings.

Sincerely,

-Liane Schmidt.

Thanks, Everyone,

Hope the stanzas show soon.

Hi, Athlyn, how are you?
I love the images and the contrast you use between the natural world and the human world. It reminds me a little of myself, since I love the scent of trees and the salty breeze. I think that going with an archaic approach to free verse is a little off-centre for you,… what I mean is, we live in the 21rst century, therefore our choice of language is going to be more personal than “’tis”, “naught”, and “doth”. That ‘naught’ line especially; the use of the word subtracts from the personal touch it could have if you had used the word ‘nothing’. I used to think that poetic expression deserved an older version of English too, but, just as Old English and Middle English have transversed into Modern English, poetry has become just as transitive. Thanks for sharing.

Hi Adam,

I use language to set a tone, to paint a picture. This was a reflective piece so the quaint language was chosen to reflect the contrast between the old and the new: simpler pleasures as opposed to the modern world.

The thing I love about creative writing is that there really are no hard and fast rules, simply what flows from a writer’s thoughts.

That said, I appreciate your comments. Thanks for taking the time to read this.

Very lovely and evocative.

well done Athlyn I really enjoyed this thanks..

Great work! nicely done! that was beautiful and lovely poem. Loved it! nice pics too

I have to admit, growing up in the mountains has been the inspiration for many poems.I’ve been so affeted by the natural beauty around me.

Very beautiful, gets me in the mood for spring

Hi Susan,
The woods are a magical place indeed. One could almost believe in fairies when tender little flowers are blooming their hearts out.

Absolutely a lovely piece. I also love the serentiy your photos depicts.

This is a really awesome poem with brilliant picture!

Parts of this came via the muse.I wanted the flow to be just right.

This is very nice.

Most of my poetry and prose have been inspired by the West Kootenays in B.C.

This is a great poem… I love it…

Thank you!