He Was Really Old

LOVELYHONEY on Dec 18, 2009

A young girl falls in love mistakenly.

Mistaken in Love

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I was wrong

I waited for you

Your mistaken love

But I was wrong

I thought you’d be able

To catch up

Now I see how feeble you are

And can hardly make it

All I can now wish

Upon your nose plant a kiss

And wish you a very good night,

Hope when the sun does rise

You may then me surprise

As you do then perhaps rise

The sun shall also rise

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Comments (14)

albert1jemi on Dec 18, 2009
nice poem
Stan Wilson on Dec 18, 2009
Like that line the sun shall always rise,no matter what happens or our circumstances,that gives us hope,our lives too can be like the sun, always rise…very good poem…top marks
Teves on Dec 19, 2009
Very expert writer…
K V Venkataramana on Dec 19, 2009
Your poems evoke fantastic images.
Videomark on Dec 19, 2009
Very nice.
LovelyWolf on Dec 19, 2009
Nice write is all i can say, so good i’m speechless!
qasimdharamsy on Dec 19, 2009
Very Nice…i like it…
SharifaMcFarlane on Dec 19, 2009
Surprising twist. The title had me expecting something else. I enjoyed it.
Marie Antoinette on Dec 19, 2009
Great, loved this one a lot – what about those final lines? – so clever!
Frances Lawrence on Dec 19, 2009
This one seemed very sad.
Brenda Nelson on Dec 19, 2009
he is too old.
PhoenixRox on Dec 20, 2009
Cleverly written. Thanks LH
Roberto Sardelli 1 on Dec 20, 2009
i really enjoyed this one, thank you
Eunice Tan on Dec 21, 2009
Good expression

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