Lead us not into temptation but deliver us from evil. I want to go to heaven, but I won’t find out until judgement day. Good work!

Very thought provoking write. Nicely composed lines. Well written!

Good-job

This poem has contradictory opinions. You say in the poem that everything you ever wanted is laid at your feet, but then later on this is doubted in the poem.

This could be a good piece if it were not for som faulty logic.

loualbert: That’s the whole point of the piece. Sometimes we appear to be offered our very heart’s desires. We may not know if it’s real until we try to hold it in our hands. We also don’t know if there are strings attached – what price we may pay to have what we want.

Great Piece. Life is full of manipulation. “) I feel You.

It’s an excellent poem and poses an age old question at the end like why do we call the third hand on a watch the second hand?

Very thoughtful and poignant. Something we all have to deal with, too. Nicely expressed!

Of course the poem expresses confliction.” When you believe in things you don’t understand then you’ll suffer.” Here we have the longing for something attractive to one’s feeling to actually work out, but instead of rationally taking one’s time to become more and more acquainted with the person to make a determination, instead, the mind seems to dwell on mysticism and superstition as a barometer to measure hope that someone turns out to be as we would like them to be by the grace of some invisible power. It fails to acknowledge that the principle herself is a mix of negative and positive and that no matter who she deals with…it will still result in a mix of negative and positive. At any rate, the longer one engages a person over time (intentionally for a long time) the more one can gauge about the compatability of the person…and it does not mean the other person is evil just because they turned out to be someone incompatable with you. And it is still worth a mention that it is possible to talk out some incompatable issues and work them into something acceptable.

Leonardo: Thank you so much for your insightful comments. It’s true that the person is not evil just because they are not what you expected them to be. Many times the grass looks greener on the other side – we arrive to find many bare patches in the lawn.

Thanks again!

I very much enjoyed this poem it really is a very thought provoking piece!

Great piece!! Very thought provoking and applicable to many of the decisions we must make in life.

Very emotional and heartfelt. Great one indeed! Thought provoking!

Relationships are like rolling dice. It’s all about taking chances. Nice one, ashan.

I think the difficulty comes because no relationship is all good or all bad, nor is each of us one or the other.

It’s a real thought provoking piece. so true and has a great message to tell us.

This poem makes me wake up and realize. Overall nice nice work!!!!

Life’s packages come with some hidden treats. We have to take some risk at times. Nice poetry.

I don’t think your hell bound at all. x great poem as usual.